the eyes of gone

 

the eyes of gone

 

 

resilient arms

enfold the tears which

levitate the passion's weight

 

after the circle is shorn

in uneven pattern

the threads calling for recount.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/8/2020

Reviews

[Diana]

If only we could recount the threads. The title of this one really jumped out at me. Such a poignant feel to this...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Diana...
j.

[andrew mitchell]

A concoction of things in this write an election flys by in mind and how the patterns in some relationships start to unravel for relationships are never truly equal or even.Two people will always be at odds with each other.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Spot on, sir. Thank you, andrew,
j.

[barleygirl]

"threads calling for a recount" -- that phrase summons up so much & it's not just about election results. I'm reminded of how some write erotica as unfolding on high-thread-count sheets only . . . so many different ways to be discriminating (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, you get me...thank you, Margie...I never really thought of myself as discriminating...
mmmm
j.

[light and ashes]

Another incredible and brilliant write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Light, you are kind.
j.

[light and ashes]

You are very welcome.

[Chris Shaw]

the threads calling for a recount.... somehow this doesn't sound like an optimistic outlook for whomever the threads represent. A poem which is multi layered in my opinion.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Chris,
j.

[Neville]

there is no safety in numbers anymore .. is there .. mown down we are in huge but random numbers ... and our eyes weep indiscriminately .. not seeing anymore but feeling both our own and others pain ... there has to be a limit but we ride a sliding scale ............... profoundly apocalyptic maybe ... I could be wrong.. but that's where ya took me this early ayem jacob ............. N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really like this insightful review, Neville...thank you...
j.