Love this Jacob
Excellent
Love the advice to paint houses lol
Very original
Good talking dialogue like a two way conversation with you and yourself with another writer he or she standing reading listening and can’t get a word in edgeways
great poem loved it !
Ha, this is so amusing. I've known one or two in my time who have ripped my words to bits and not only that, appeared to get sheer delight from it. Nitpicking at every possible opportunity. Did it stop me writing? No, of course not. It could equally apply to ourselves. We are our own worse critics, and I know I have also ripped my work apart as well? Very thoroughly too on many occasions.
Chris
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
Thank you for your kind review and the smile, Chris,
j.
Hello, Jacob! :)
This "poem" really doesn't rhyme very well, but it sends a clear message; which I would agree with if you could trim the middle section and stretch out the ending a bit. And, maybe try to keep the lines the same length? Thanks for sharing.
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
Well, Geez, matt...why don't you just rewrite it for me....ha ha...:))
thanks for the smile.<.. read moreWell, Geez, matt...why don't you just rewrite it for me....ha ha...:))
thanks for the smile.
j.
This is an hysterical bashing of one's poetry, as a reader of it, proposed to be a professional.... I love your dialogue and and "suggestions" for improvement.... all of it is so well done and I believe the poet says F--K you at the end and the suggestion box goes down the drain and the poet keeps writing.....
Best, B
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
yes, we keep writing, I hope.
Got a rejection from a magazine once, hand written, just one wo.. read moreyes, we keep writing, I hope.
Got a rejection from a magazine once, hand written, just one word, "Nope"! didn't get over that one for awhile...how flip that editor was.
thank you, Betty, let me know which one line to keep here and how to rewrite the rest. :)))))))
wow, no holding back in this one! well I do paint houses, well mine anyway and no ego here, good lord, I need his help writing yet I am still gonna write ;) and please do tear them down and rewrite them, they need help! all kidding aside I love this! suggestion box....gotta love them!
Posted 2 Years Ago
2 Years Ago
Do you paint Little Pink Houses?
Thank you for stopping by mine and for your kind comments.read moreDo you paint Little Pink Houses?
Thank you for stopping by mine and for your kind comments.
j.
2 Years Ago
I am trying to get some more reading in and have promised myself to do so. See ya soon
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..