too near rhyme

too near rhyme

 

 

 

okay okay okay

I'll rhyme already.....

 

twisted sister lives deep in the mountain

silence flows from her like water from a fountain

 

but in shallow spurts

of hurt

I insert

 

that

 

borrowed family keep me alive

away from the chaos I will strive

to drive

no jive

I am a bee running from the hive

 

 

so there....rhyme

is it too cute

or is it a beaut-

of a poem

 

constricted to form

I choke on the norm

I have to be free to roam

 

Oh wow, slant rhyme

didn't think I had it in me.

 

Let's dance with the words

let's let them sing their own precious song

their own random way

 

it's still poetry

ain't it?

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/8/21

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

Dancing to Drums… feeling the Season… drinking Rum and blinking at Stars… Cookies and the Milky Way… Charming Moonbeams remind me to sleep until Morning Breaks. tenderly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pat,
j.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

The student in me would say yes it's still poetry. The wise man would contemplate longer before answering cryptically one could find poetry in silence. While the mirthful Jester would laugh knowing the answer resides between them both. Wonderful poem J, as always my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You are a wise man, Carlos,
thanks for your words,
j.

[lightsong]

OMG hhhaahaha Wow SO lovely so cute and IT IS Poetry I applaud You Mr. J because I know I wouldn't be able to go far than the first verse, wohooo your first lines so inviting, so delightful, enthusiastic! actually I didn't know You "had it on You" 😆I am glad to see this side of You written!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, lightsong!
j.