Something wss certainly happening here. It appears another had much influence. An ability to soothe and calm in earlier years. A reflection perhaps on a past love, her memory still being able to bring a little magic. There is a whole lot of love here that's for sure J, when you think about her.
Some memories are better than others. When the thought of another can raise the consciousness like this one apparently does, living in the past can be a pleasurable experience. Just don't stay there. Great imagery in this one.
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1 Year Ago
nope, can't stay there ever, but the past gives us words for the present. Thank you, John,
j.
Wow.... how true ... touching in the Blue waters of the Tributaries in the mysteries of the Sea. I am acquiring an attitude of Peaceful feelings... as we carry our Past within our Present. I always knew that we help each other the Most when we love and spend time with another. No need for forgiveness as each person has a choice.. Some people are gifted to contribute in different ways. Our World could be Rich without Wars if only we Believed in each other. tenderly, Pat
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1 Year Ago
it could be very rich....we wouldn't know how to spend all the love and peace.
thank you, Pat.. read moreit could be very rich....we wouldn't know how to spend all the love and peace.
thank you, Pat,
j.
I love all the water metaphors here like a gurgling brook on each line they amazed me
I read it three times and in third read I realised the irises were indeed flowers on the river bank and not eyes as I had first read them to be
Quite a voyage you take us on here! I was a bit taken aback at the beginning, unsure of 'embedded irises,' but I quickly got over that as you took us with you, falling in love, being in love, loving completely into the embrace of not only each other but the sea, where all tributaries eventually go.
That evocation of water and its actions makes the poem speak for many. It goes beyond a personal remembrance and into a study of love and earth and what we do about both.
There are so many fragile things in and around us - will we find something/someone to hold onto, a glance that emboldens us? I think we all can see such a thing eventually, if we remain aware.
Fragility can be crippling, but it also says we're open to that which surrounds us, recognizing the sight of fragile things and people outside ourselves, and sometimes, hopefully, we act on them.
This is a poem that is readable on many levels, and so a success on all of them. Thank you.
LJ
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1 Year Ago
Thank you for your very kind review, LJ,
You really went in depth with your comments... .. read moreThank you for your very kind review, LJ,
You really went in depth with your comments...
"that sound", kinda reminds me of that Buffalo Springfield song... "hey, hey, time we stop, what's that sound, everybody look what's going down".... pretty cool protest song from back in the day....
one view of your poem might be a story of love unfolding and the consequences of opening ones heart to love, being overwhelmed by the oceans of emotions and then calmed after the blood cools down some....
anothe view makes this poem more metaphor for the wworld we face today, where "tributaries" each battle it out for dominance as the flow to the sea.... what's that sound is heard in the shouts of "hooray for our side"....
I like both views actually, especially since the modern view oof love is often over who is right, who gets to dominate... but in any case Jacob, I enjoyed reading your poem, enjoyed the way it takes the reader down one of these tributaries and into the ocean.... and might even convince the reader love is worth the effort.... even with the rapids and waterfalls...
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1 Year Ago
thanks, Curt...and yes, that song was and still is an anthem for us and our 60's----
Yes, the.. read morethanks, Curt...and yes, that song was and still is an anthem for us and our 60's----
Yes, there was "something happening here, what it is ain't exactly clear"---
still isn't so clear is it? "singin' songs and a carryin' signs, mostly say hooray for our side"---
I like both avenues down which you took this.
j.
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..