the last blue sky

the last blue sky

precipitation of memory

the rain falls, thoughts hit the ground

and splash into fragments

he held the sun once

his grip was solid

and extenuating

a circumstance the mind entrapped

now he let go

the umbrella, as he opened

needful things spilled out

his soaked failings

so evident in puddles

of triumph for what he could remember

there was light through the blinds

still, as his grip suffered

something shed 

something dead

he just sat there staring out the window of time

his befuddled recollections

teardrops falling against the pane.

erin-cilberto

5/30/23

Reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

When I worked in hospice the patients were encouraged by the social workers to do a “life review”; I’m not so certain that is always a good idea. That’s how I heard this poem as well.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate you, and where you went with this piece.
Thank you, Winston,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

The last blue sky is Stormy in
My mind… it begins with a Breeze in the trees.. and then the dear drops on the Window pane… your poetry is a 💗 lovely reading that gives me a perspective of Angel Wings… gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Pat,
j.

[FGFRANKLIN]

This has such a pervasive sadness inundating the entirety of the poem. It's a morose and depressive feeling of anxiety and uncertainty tinged with the regret of realization. You handle the nuance expertly with a deft hand and heart. The nostalgic sense of loss is palpable. I applaud the craft put into this. I'd say I enjoyed but that somehow seems off the mark here. But it was very moving. F. Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your kind words, Fabian,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

The last blue sky for someone special, is certainly enough to set the rain in motion. The memories are a blessing, even though they can be painful. A sad poem but one of great beauty dear J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.

[Weeping willow]

Such a beautiful write, filled with sadness that touches the heart. Images painting pictures across my mind.
Nicely done ;-}

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, willow,
j.

[emmajoygreen]

Beautifully sad, jacob: a strong thread of life past, slowly weakening yet showing the creations and abilities of a life full of colour and achievement, love and far, far more. Bravo, sir.

'he held the sun once
his grip was solid
and extenuating
a circumstance the mind entrapped'

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I promise someday I will write something that will make you laugh or at least smile...why is sad so much easier to write?
thank you, em
j.

[emmajoygreen]

Whatever you offer has quality, Jacob. Plus, some great mind once said that to feel happy is God's man's gift to one's day, to feel sad (empathy) is God's gift to Mankind.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Beautiful metaphors
The last line did it for me !!
Great write love it Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Julie,
j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

This is sadly beautiful, Jacob. Those recollections are beautiful reflections of a life lived long enough to look back on.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

appreciate you, Linda Marie.
thanks for your words,
j.