the last two minutes

the last two minutes

it's a flagrant foul

worth a technical

for the push towards my heart

and then the blocked love

I tried to come down your lane

but you held me

with your smile

then walked

an uneven game

a swish of feelings

but they don't count

when the recipient 

goal tends.

erin-cilberto

3/5/24

Reviews

[Stella Armour]

Barriers are usually put up for a reason , but teasing is not playing a fair game..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

No, it is not...thank you, Stella,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

There is no winner here. The metaphor is clever. Someone is defending their corner well. The striker isn’t going to be lucky. This poem makes me think of unrequited love. That sucks and is tough on the emotions of the one who wants more.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you Chris.
I was afraid this one might be too silly...
j.

[Chris Shaw]

You know silly didn’t come into it. I got some great visuals. A bloke with a huge heart trying to score a goal in football. The goalie was a woman with huge hands. Nothing was going to get past her. lol. I often see images when reading poems.

[Desert Knave]

Once in awhile the game is rigged. Nice imagery. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Jim....

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful work. Lots of emotions.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Thomas,
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

very clever. It is frustrating when someone sends you mixed signals

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, very frustrating...thank you, Dale,
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

Oh trying to find love only to be blocked. The feelings unreciprocated and lost

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, lost...one-sided love does hurt.
thank you, P.B.
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

One sided love is never easy but live and learn and experience is how we grow