A Saturday Morning Rhyme

A Saturday Morning Rhyme

the skin starts sagging

the brain starts lagging

filtered life

of selective attention

with little or no retention

but love still touches my heart

even as we are forever apart.

erin-cilberto

4/28/25

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Wonderful write Jacob love this so true

[Ted Kniffen]

AS our dear friends the Beatles sang
"and in the end...the love you take is equal to the love you make."

The body sags ... hand strength diminishes ... but Love abides.

j. always appreciate your words of love in all its guses...and the hope they inspire.

The face and body may sag ... but inside there is still that young man wondering ...
what the Hell happened.

[Relic]

We're all like pears sitting on the ground, fallen beneath the tree. And life is like the bees that come along and land on us.

Inside, the sweet part, I guess that's the last two lines here.

Good one, J.

[Desert Knave]

Definitely quite the punch in those last 2 lines. Well done. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Jim.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Ah the aging process. Good though, if love can still touch your heart even if it is a memory. Sad brevity dear J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Chris.
j.

[Thomas W Case]

Great work. Powerful in brevity.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you ,Thomas.
j.

[John the Baptist]

This one has a "Don't give up the ship!" quality to it. Life may be "filtered," but the hope of love is still there.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, John.
j.

[redzone]

even when our skin sags and we become forgetful, we really never forget the one we love(d).
-Curt

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Curt.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I filter my life through coffee grounds like T.S. Eliot's Prufrock. But it does make a bit jittery at times. We do hold onto memories. I enjoyed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

We are all jittery at times...too much Coffee? or too much poetry?

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Maybe too much poetry. There's no such thing as too much coffee until you can thread a running sewing machine. ;)

[Patricia]

this is touching and love the sagging and lagging and selective attention and retention, sad about the forever apart yet beautiful poetry, as always you wow me with your writes

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I get lucky sometimes.
Thank you, Patricia.