A Seasonal Sonnet

A children's poem.

When Summer’s heat does sting like lemon drops,

And I can hear the calming brush of Rain

Upon my clear and blissful windowpane,

Rain tells the fever ev'rywhere to stop.

But who, I wonder, tells the frosty Clouds,

That it is time for lemon drops again,

The Sun would like to dance some now and then,

A wintr’y Spring could never be allowed?

 

He is the jolly Spring himself, of course,

Who tells the chilling Ice, “The answer’s no”.

“Come quickly or I’ll have to use some force.”

He says, “It’s finally time for you to go.”

And so, the season Spring does now enforce,

Of course, is Winter and his bitter Snow.

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews would be greatly appreciated :)

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This is a fun bit of whimsy you've written here! And I like the fact that instead of being all clumped together as sonnets usually are, you've made two powerfully imagined stanzas. It reads well, the iambs hit the right notes, you've mixed in a bit of Shakespearean lingo with the "does" as modifiers, and the musicality is absolutely stupendous with strong imagery to match. And the "enforce/Of course" is pretty clever.....although, "enforce" may not mean what you want it to mean in this sentence....what you've said essentially in the final couplet is that Spring establishes Winter by force, when you really intend to mean Spring expels him or something of the like (....Spring could enforce natural law on "Winter and his bitter snow"....maybe you could play around with that since you're already personifying the seasons themselves). Apart from that one little detail, this is fantastic! Well done!

[Ethan]

Im sorry I missed this. Thank you very much for your wonderful review

[Shasha]

A great imagery and a great description! A nice work, keep writing!

[Ethan]

Thank you Sasha :)

[Shasha]

You're welcome!

[Hosimone]

I love, love, love poems about the seasons! Well done on this!

[Ethan]

Haha me too, thank you :)

[Joey Nizz]

Words with a great image, you portrayed this perfectly, good job :)

[Ethan]

Thanks as always Joey :)

[Joey Nizz]

Your most welcome Ethan, Keep writing :)

[Nora]

This is truly stunning , and your descriptions just perfect 👍

[Ethan]

Thank you Nourhan :)))

[Sam]

Wow! I really liked this especially the imagery behind it. You made it very easy to picture your poem! Definitely enjoyed it!

[Ethan]

Thank you Sam :)

[Tazeen Ahmed]

It did rain today, in India...
I could feel the transitions!
This is truly amazing :)

[Ethan]

Does it rain much there? And thank you

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Welcome!
It's monsoon season here.

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

You have a strong imagination, sir. The imagery is very strong and beautiful. And of course, the language is great. Keep writing.

Love,
Vasilees.

[Ethan]

Thank for your review :P

[Najam Us Saher]

It was very soothing to read. I loved the imagery.

[Ethan]

Thank you very much

[Najam Us Saher]

It was my pleasure reading this :)

[Sofia]

Woah! So well penned...and Ur imagination runs riots..haha seriously..it was so amazing...thanks for sharing..I liked it..

[Ethan]

Thank you Sofia :P

[Sofia]

Most welcome :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

an eloquently constructed sonnet Ethan, injected with fun and mischief. The bard would be pleased with it.

[Ethan]

Thank you, I would be honored if he were