Falling Short of Dreams Unanswered

Falling Short of Dreams Unanswered

By:  Ethan West

I run along the tattered hall

My mind releasing thought on thought

But in the beauty of it all

Has my effort been for naught?

The bull was taken by the horns

And in so doing I have sped

Through bitter mountains bearing thorns

Along the path that few have tread

It beat me to the ground

And left me all alone

Just as I'd found

The fallen throne

Within steps of my dreams it's all for naught

I'm broken, beaten and subdued

The throne has left my every thought

The path has changed my mood

For now I will remain content

Within this barren state of then

Until my comfort asunder rent

And begin I will again...

Author's Note

I recently attempted to open a business and was beaten back by corporate. This is not my best work but describes well the feeling of that day when I was denied. Hope you enjoy!
Please do not duplicate or modify. Thanks!

Reviews

[Aarontastic]

I think it's a pretty good poem. Although your write was inspired by a personal experience, it doubles as an allegory for anyone who's ever had difficulty in striving for something so hard, only to see their efforts fall through in the end...I'm sure it's something that most people can relate to.

[ewest1220]

I agree. And I'm also thrilled you enjoyed this thank you so much for reading my work!

[Matty Bosox]

This is extremely aggresive and stomping...Each word beating the reader in the face with a great power...You start to ease off the pedal towards the end there but all in all this was a huge kick in the teeth of powerful words and extreme rythym....You definitly had a point for this and you made that point with an explosion!!! Excellent job ewest keep it up

[ewest1220]

Wow thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed this my friend thank you so much for reading!

[Matty Bosox]

This was an excellent poem

[Tate Morgan]

I thought this was really nice You put quite the effort into this and the rhymed meter as well

[ewest1220]

Thanks! It's nice to hear from you again Tate I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work!

[J. Viands]

Solid love it well done

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[That1Nerd23]

Your emotions are so intensifying in this poem. The desperation for something real, something hopeful is so evident. It flows like a bright and colorful leaf in a stream. Very lovely. Excellent piece.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it!

[That1Nerd23]

You're welcome.

[quarintine_deathangel]

Reminds me a lot of "here's my lullaby: pray for rain, lose your name and watch all your dreams fall through"-AFI 'The Interview' off sing the sorrow album. Love those guys XD It is true that the world beats you down anyway possible but you keep fighting for your wants and the dreams you have can come true. I've heard a lot of businesses going through and if you start your own it might take a few tries >.^ but one of these days you'll get it. Good luck! Thanks for writing.

[ewest1220]

AFI rules for the record ;) and thanks for the encouragement I'll keep at it. Thanks for reading I'm really glad you liked it! Oh and nice to hear from you it's been awhile since I've been on here ^_^

[kublakhan27]

I'm sure this was a painful one to write, but it's great...I'm sure a lot of people can relate to this on some level, I certainly can :)

[ewest1220]

It was a little but I felt relieved when it was finished. Anyways I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work thanks for reading my friend!

[kublakhan27]

No problem :) I know what you mean...the toughest ones to write are often the most rewarding when they're finished.

[gombeggar]

i think it's well done...seems about the only place to find a throne these daze is in ones own mind

[ewest1220]

No kidding, but I'm still chasing the darn thing

[Angelove]

Don't give up. Stay strong.i love this pome

[ewest1220]

Will do :) thanks!

[_]

YESH! IT RHYMED!!! X3 I love it! Plus it went so smooooooooooothly andd skillfully and beauuuuuuutifully! I LOVED IT! ^-^

[ewest1220]

Wow thank you so much! I'm really glad you liked it thanks for reading :)

[TheJordBaker]

great write as always, was happy to open my requests and find a poem of yours. powerful and some great lines in there, all of which emphasise a great message. nicely done.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! It's nice to hear from you again as well my friend! I'm glad you liked the new poem!