Memorable Days

The most amazing and memorable days of my life in school with my best friends...

My friends you are my blanket during the winter
You are my ice cubes during summer
Someday when I am alone
I think of all those days gone

Since I keep thinking of those lovely days
They seem like those bright sun rays
Those days I shall treasure
Be it today or forever
Just call on me when in need
You can call me selfish, or it might just be my greed
My life shall be your's ever
I shall not forget you ..nahh...never..

Love for me is you all
Without whom I am sure to fall
Support me through my lonely days
Help me through my naughty ways
I shall be your's now and then
Never ask when
For you know am your's only lady like friend...:)

Reviews

[de_maruf]

rhythmic

[Cerise]

Thankyou..:)

[Lily Mae]

I believe that great friendships are the foundation of our joy and love in life.. Well done fancy..xo

[Cerise]

Thankyou so much..:D...ya you are right..:)

[Barbara Walker]

Nice tribute to your friends. I am not sure of the word, "brightful" here. Bright would work just as well. You won't find "brightful" in the dictionary You could say, "you brightened them, like sun rays or as it stands, with"bright sun rays." Just my thoughts. A very good piece of writing.

[Cerise]

Thankyou...i will see what i can do about it..:)

[kublakhan27]

A lovely, upbeat piece...nice work :)

[Cerise]

Thankyou..:D

[kublakhan27]

No problem :D

[Dr. Wood ?]

the love for friends..in a nutshell

[Cerise]

Aw...Thankyou..:D

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

A very lovely poem about friendship. I like that you have taken the time to carefully construct each line. I think we have discussed this before and I think you said that it's just your style and that you forgot to remove them but please consider leaving the ellipsis (...) off of the end of the lines going forward. The reader will know to pause without them. Also, try to put a blank line between concept breaks or when moving from one thought to the next. It will provide a pleasing vacation as we move through this dense jungle of prose.

Excellent. Keep up the good work! :)

[Cerise]

Aww..Thankyou. Ah i shall remove it asap..:)..Thankyou for reminding..:P

[Oh Wow, Lovely.]

Me likey!:)

[Cerise]

Aww..Thankyou..:)

[Oh Wow, Lovely.]

Your Welcome :)

[gombeggar]

nice flow to this

[Cerise]

Thankyou..:D