Feelings

feelings poured out during some terrible times.

I don't know what is going on

Life is so uncool

What the heck is wrong

Something is amiss

Something is truly gone......

The reason of my living seems to fade

There in an uncontrollable rage

I fear for the war in my heart and mind

I was always known to be sweet and kind.....

The days have changed, I feel estranged

The tears are waiting to run down my cheek

The torture and pain makes my future looks bleak

There is a stillness that gives me fright

Lord only knows what has gone wrong or right....

I hope to see a spark of life

Panache, vitality, glimmer and desire

Far away from doubts and strife

Looking at a new day with bright sunshine

Hoping that we all will one day redefine

The reason of our living and our screwed up time.....

Author's Note

please feel free to tell me your opinion

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

I relate so deeply to this that I'm not even sure how to really review it. Every line resonated with me. A poignant and powerful piece to say the least :)

[Cerise]

Aww..thank you so much..it meant a lot..:)

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure :)

[.]

Um, pretty good I'd say. And yes, nice word choice. Keep writing. :)

[Cerise]

Thank you so much..:)

[.]

My pleasure. :)

[luviva]

well it is an expressive write and that you achieved! You got a reader to see abit of you rage and the innocence ofnot knowing its cause. Weldone

[Cerise]

thank you so much...:)

[Baby Ricochet]

Good times bad times you know I've had my share. Good poem

[Cerise]

thank you...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a poem that lets it all out, and very clearly. Your last stanza offers a sliver of hope, and that is always a good thing in the midst of anger. Well expressed.

[Cerise]

Thank you so much for your kind words..:)

[Sami Khalil]

I'm glad I have read this in time. Now I will leave you alone...A splendid poem...:)

[Cerise]

thank you so much...:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[SyberRose]

Nice flow and enjoyed the theme...nicely done...Rose

[Cerise]

thank you :)

[Emerald Seas]

I like your picture to go with your poem. I love the message. I would suggest actually spelling 'be' as it is the only abbreviated spelling in the entire poem and therefore looks odd to me.
I understand the pissed off part... I've contemplated all sorts of things out of pain and retaliation for wrongs I felt done to me... but it does no good so I just move along! But boy do I understand that power! If I ever unleash it - hell hath no fury like a woman scorned.

[Cerise]

hahahahah...Thank you for such wonderful words my lady..and thank you for telling my mistakes...:)

[Mark]

Hope keeps us going through the darkness, in search of some light. A very nice tale of dark times where being hopeful is all there is to cling to maybe.

[Cerise]

thank you so much for your kind words..:)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Awh, that was a very nice emotive, FF. Hope you'll feel better soon. :)

[Cerise]

thank you..:)