Who says your stomach is a land of thousand butterflies?

Love is very different,unlike the feelings given out by those diminutive butterflies

My senses were always fed on the concept of butterflies,whenever true love arrives

They say whenever love hits you or comes across,

your stomach modifies into a land of beautiful butterflies.

These butterflies are of different colours and patterns

They tie knots and make it a labyrinth

They give feelings of giddiness and numbness

They make you hop and jolt

Breathing becomes the hardest part

The very thought of him deviates you from walking the normal path

They say when love arrives,the golden strands of your cascading hair fly and communicate with the invisible air around

They say your scarf curves at the end to make a gesture that your choice is world-class

They say two beautiful flowers come closer and cuddle among themselves

They say if you are lucky enough,it might rain from the heavens

But when i loved,

My stomach was no home to any sort of butterfly

I never felt like I was out of breath

I never experienced those feelings of giddiness

I never even saw my strands going up all the way and chatting with the air above

I don't even remember wearing a scarf on that particular day

The only feeling which penetrated my chest that day,on seeing him was purely of love

The hope of future sparkling in his eyes and of a long- lasting love

Since then,I have been under this constant fear of breathlessness and the thought of losing you.

But what and how does it matter because you are already gone by now

I was a stupid,insipid creature

I turned blind trying to make myself good for you

That in the process,little did I realise,I was losing myself completely in this hell

Trying to be a decent lover you could ever get

I was thus striving to save a love

Which had ,all this while, been miserably wrong

It's just a message which I want to convey

No love comes with a filmy background

No butterflies are there

And no music around.

Author's Note

Thanks for reading

Reviews

[Bushra Naqshbandi]

Amazing poem. Reality! Dream love v/s real love with your own experience included as a bonus. Great work! :) Need I say the imagery was beautiful? I'm still picturing the scenes. Beautifully written.

Whenever the true love arrives
According to me it should be whenever true love arrives not ''the true love''. The is used for some particular thing to be sure but not here. I mean, we generally don't use it with true love. True love is true love.

They say whenever love hits you or comes across,
your stomach modifies into a land of beautiful butterflies.
These butterflies are of different colours and patterns
They tie knots and make it a labyrinth
I loved these lines. They're so nicely written. Absolutely amazing use of imagery.

They give the feelings of giddiness and numbness
It should be they give feelings of giddiness and numbness.

I never felt like I was out of breathing
It ought to be ''I never felt like I was out of breath'' because we don't use ''out of breathing''.

Trying to be a decent lover you could ever get
The sentence is grammatically incorrect. It could be ''trying to be as decent a lover as you could ever get'' or trying to be the most decent lover you could ever get''.

It's just a message which I want to convey
No love comes with a filmy background
No butterflies are there
And no music around.
These lines are awesome. A beautiful and appropriate way to end the poem. Great job! :)

[fattycbreezy52]

Omg.THanks a lot.I appreciate your commenT and yes i would definitely like to make rectifications and edits as soon as possible.My word had this ready and I just pasted this in here without making any rectifications or giving further revisions.I am sorry for that.Take care.I need people like you to rectify me whenever I go wrong.:)