A tarnished maiden

Dressed as a maestro,

That cacodemon secured my confidence

Seeing into the life of my maiden organs,

And filling them with his exuberant fluid.

I enjoyed the flexibility of this deviant relationship

Basking in the euphoria of the paragon.

Allowing him to merge my confidential with his taciturnity.

Pouring into his bewitching ears,

My dark secrets.

Had I know his advances would rape me

and dash me against a passionless rock

in the middle of a gruesome night,

I would have prayed hard to escape.

Escape from his devilish clutches.

But my screams faded into the scenes of the room strewn with dire consequences.

Every breath missing its count,

Every fabric torn apart.

Bare fangs bowing before his malefactor instincts.

The fruit of love once crimson,

Turned totally black.

I am wearing black too

Tossed by a black-hearted fiend.

I wish myself to fade away

Like a darkness in the extreme dark,

Author's Note

Thanks for reading.And not just reading,but understanding

Reviews

[Joel Crow]

Your word choice is excellent, in all but the final stanza. Is that intentional? The repetition of "black" seems appropriate, but perhaps the final line could find something more expressive than "extreme dark." Maybe pitch, or ebon, or blindness.
Also slight type-o in the first line of the third stanza: *known. The comma at the end too, but this may have been intentional.
It is a powerful poem; you've done a great job of using the sacred/demonic split that defines
the terrible circumstances of the relationship. I appreciate that you use complete thoughts instead of fragments. The juxtaposed image of prayer vs. screaming is exceptional.

[fattycbreezy52]

Thank you so much for the lovely review. It's so helpful. Also thank you for pointing out that typo, Joel:)

[TheLostMind]

Another tale of love, loss and deceit. . A never ending search for a person who loves you for what you are and not for what you can offer.. Again I loved the way this one is written.. A taboo subject entangled in the sweet bitter mesh called love. ..

[fattycbreezy52]

your reviews fascinate me.You grasp my writings very well.Thanks:)

[TheLostMind]

You are welcome :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Very powerful. This has so much sadness and hurt and anger all combined in the terrible duplicitous seduction of a woman by a devious and self serving man. Well told in bold, bold phrases FCB!

[fattycbreezy52]

aha.I was waiting for such an intense,bold and serious comment:)thanks a lot John:)