Fookin' Unicorns

Over the moon where unicorns play charades

is where your love sent me on flight

that journey of places in time and space

no one touched the stars and moon as you did

my soul was touched by an epic d'angel 

my heart turned a special hue of passion

then you cut me and the story ended when i bled

a different dark shaded color of fancy betrayal 

the memory still lives on, and the lesson learned...

when you hang out with bloody unicorns you get fucked

                                                            

Reviews

[KeeD]

I always knew they were "b******s" but never admitted it to myself. Thank you for showing me the light Frieda.
"my heart turned a special hue of passion
a different dark shaded color of fancy betrayal" The contrast of these two lines fits in so beautifully in this poem. Ingenious writing and the end had such an awesome message, Mess with the bull you get the horns, in this case a f*****g unicorn. haha. "Excuse my language":P.

[Frieda P]

Thanks, that was one of my more fun vents! ;-)
...and I said it first, so it's all good hah

[writing mojo]

wow nice ending to a flutter stream of words which choke the senses and leave the head to heart message to study up on, you have magnetism shuffling, to get back into garments left in a pile on the floor, a ghost of words to haunt the protagonist sentence, peeking, waiting for someone to say enough is enough ...good piece

[Frieda P]

Eh? why didn't you just say that in the first place?
thanks...

[RachelReaper]

freakin unicorns.... sometimes they can be so awful rude! haha, loved this, you have a very creative mind to be able to make this piece of writing.

[Frieda P]

hah glad you enjoyed it...it was a fun write...thanks

[Aidz]

LOVED IT I F%$Ken hate the b******s, they drink my Tequila!!! leave rainbow s**t everywhere (you tried cleaning that stuff, sparkles for weeks!!!) EVIL EVIL I tells ya

[Frieda P]

Ahh the magic word Tequila! no wonder they're drawn to it ;)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When we expect a loving relationship to be perfect we set ourselves up for disappointment... but I like how you said it better.

the memory still lives on, and the lesson learned...
when you hang out with bloody unicorns you get fucked

[Frieda P]

lol, I really wan't asking for perfection, I'm old enough to know there is no such thing! ....but thanks Cowboy.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I figured you weren't. I knew you were being funny. And that was hilarious.

[Frieda P]

;-)

[Tai Ryens]

Symbolizing an incubus or succubus as a unicorn . . . Classic, and original. Brilliant analogy.

[Frieda P]

thank you kindly...

[Tarry Franck]

Nicely done - love the pic too

[Frieda P]

Thank you kindly.

[Tarry Franck]

:)

[Sheila Kline]

So, that's what happened to me? And, all the while I speculated it was the "frackin" whackers hacking away at my heart! Now, I feel totally better because I sent that unicorn packing away moons ago!
All joking aside.......OMG, did I just say that????.....great poem with lots of words for thought!! I just ate them all too!!

[Frieda P]

Your reviews are always entertaining, I might write a poem just to get one of them from you! thanks ;)

[Sheila Kline]

That would be terrific............let me know if you do!!

[SparrowSong]

I never cared for fairy tales...thank you for putting the stark reality into how it really is, ha ha!! I see your sense of humor has come out to play again...love the image.

[Frieda P]

And you just made me smile :D thanks.

[David Scott]

That should be obvious by observing the big horn... Ha too funny.

[Frieda P]

*wink* thanks ;-)

[Frieda P]

Had to check back here after your latest....*wink* again ;-)

[LA Lorena]

LOL! I like this one. It's like a la-la fairytale then reality comes clanging down in all its bloody wonder and gory detail. Love that last line, just wish that I had written it!

[Frieda P]

hah, well, I had to make up for that last fiasco ;-)