Then You Paused

I used to be your 'tiny dancer'...

Heat of your breath

              on my neck

the warmth of your body

  as we sleep

your arm caresses

           the small of my back

morning will dawn

           and so will dark truth

the look in your eyes

             will tell the story

you used to love me so

time stood still... 

til 'the end of time'

'time' expired

          sooner than expected

  called me 'tiny dancer'

and sang me love songs

         'When I say softly, slowly,

hold me closer, tiny dancer',

 

we go through the motions

                  as though we're still 'in love'

the weight has surrendered

            your kisses and warm embrace

      weakness on my part keeps me captivated

           even when I know you've stopped trying,

my silly notions have me convinced

        i can make you love me again

then you wake with conviction,

 you finally found your strength, 

                 yet your voice waivers

'i don't want to hurt you, but.....'

 then you paused

and time stood still 

Reviews

[Jamie Cook]

*~*~*~* as though we're still 'in love' *~*~*~*

That line I have no idea why put deserved its small frame.....that was my favorite line ^-^ but the whole poem deserved a shrine! *gives you trophy of yourself* Here, you deserve it the Freida Awards ^^ WOOHOOOOO! The poem was awesome the ending made me leedle leedle leedle in a good way, like in a crazy woot woot way ^^

[Frieda P]

Ha you crack me up Jamie, thanks so much for this grand review! ;-)

[Jamie Cook]

Aw welcome Frieda ^^

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Ouch that hesitation can be like a shot to the heart... for when a loved one needs to think it means they are thinking of an easy way to let us down.

[Frieda P]

Was bigger than an ouch, I assure you. Thanks Dale.

[Androglossia]

Sometimes, the enormity of dedication keeps us on an emotional chain. Slipping into the routine of a wavering relationship can make us blind to the reality of the matter, and this leads to an unhappy existence. Sometimes, we need to be our own hero. Dejection is made apparent throughout the poem which that made the piece standout.

[Frieda P]

Yes, you nailed it, I've been blind, stupidly blind for way too long, at least as it relates to this one. Thanks for your insightful review Maryanne.

[The 13th Eros]

There is a beautiful agony in your voice; the wishing and wanting for the eyes of yesterday. Time does have a way of killing the dance. (I hope with all my heart that this isn't autobiography, sweet poet.)

[Frieda P]

Unfortunately it is, soul mates don't always last an eternity...thanks for your sweet review 13th Eros.

[The 13th Eros]

Then there is only better and deeper for you. Let your soul seek it fully. xo

[Frieda P]

If only it were that easy, this old gals got stage fright, if you know what I mean. xo

[The 13th Eros]

Then, we must get you some rehearsal time. Best things for stage fright. xo

[Frieda P]

Ha, I'll keep that in mind my friend!

[quinfinn]

"now she's in me, always with me...tiny dancer in my hand" so why would you let her go when you hold her in the palm of your hand? seems we forget what we fought so hard to achieve and how to covet that which gives us tenderness and awe...very good, frieda. i guess the old saying is true...at least in some cases....familiarity breeds contempt. some people forget what it is to love as much as they are loved....a lesson i have never forgotten. more song quotes...."i found love on a two way street and lost it on a busy highway"....too busy to remember why we love? too bad. i want to cry but, i won't do it anymore, not for myself....but always for others.

[Frieda P]

Good question quin...I have none of the answers, as I know you are affected by this also, I do appreciate your kind words.

[quinfinn]

glad to be privvy to your talent

[kublakhan27]

I guess I can't refer to the song cuz you already have in the piece itself ;P But even if you didn't, I probably wouldn't bother after reading this, as this is obviously a bitter piece...morning will dawn, and so will dark truth...that gets to the heart of the matter pretty swiftly...what more can I say from a strictly critical perspective? Nothing really...from an emotional standpoint, I can say lots, but it can all be summed up in one simple phrase...you deserve better.

[Frieda P]

Oh Steve, you actually made me tear up. Thank you, this is bittersweet really, this was the 'love of my life' or so I thought, still have good memories...was a tough write.

[kublakhan27]

:) I'm sorry, I didn't think my words would have that much of an effect, but hopefully you were able to find some solace or therapy in getting it out...I do know how this feels...I can't remember if I should showed you the one called I Wrote Something but it's kind of my equivalent to this piece...stay strong :)

[Frieda P]

How could you even think that, of course they do, send me the RR for that one, I'd love to read it Steve. xo