~Last Breath

For Lee with Love...

Last thought, 

         last breath,

   last moments

drowning my mind

          in a tsunami of grief

    what thoughts of desperation

         devoured your soul

was your heart broken,

 your mind irreparable 

your spirit severed

     from your force of being?

You took your life,

in an instant...

         other's went along for the ride

suicide kills more than one,

 in your release,

there is no peace

 for those left behind

you wrote your last chapter

        scribbled note tells naught

  your book of life never finished

you will always remain

a brilliant butterfly

   fluttering freely

          in my heart of heart's memory

Reviews

[Deuces]

Wow. This definitely hit hard. My best friend took this life at the age of 23 and I was the one to discover this. Your words feel like they came straight my brain to this page.

Suicide surely kills more than one. It creates a coldness in those around you that really never leaves.

Deep, real piece. Thanks for this.

[Frieda P]

So sorry to hear that Cyntax, 23 is so young, just on the brink of really living life, a real tragedy. And no, it never leaves the heart...if only people would realize this & ask for help...I get the desperation but it's so very difficult in the aftermath of this kind of loss. Thanks for your kind words. My heart goes out to you.

[lee von cleef]

Suicide, brutal,death brutal,Life Brutal, Et tu, Brute ?,The big a*s tall pine,alive or dead a lawyers question,a thousand extra dollars if you wear your seat belt,but dead you will be,absent but all your thoughts essence passed on there rip ripples in life wave at emotional tsunami,your absence hands all emotional education ,quick course in weight gain, loss is heavy,and I, We are unprepared for its indifference,and the crumb trail,gone now but the flowers, layered on the coffin are internal.


ya the raw edge is ,still as the sound,of her absence is a step in reality.

[Frieda P]

The only reality I know, is her ashes spread to the wind, and the absence of the sweetest person to live.....thanks lee.

[lee von cleef]

tough spot ,literary emotion,words never seem full enough...

[Renée]

Listened

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Renee, sometimes that's all it takes...

[Renée]

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[Frieda P]

I see you're a lefty :-)

[Renée]

OMG does it show ? giggling

[Frieda P]

My son is a lefty, you guys are brilliant right? ;-)

[Renée]

OMG does it show ? giggling ( ;

[Frieda P]

LOL!!!

[Renée]

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[Blue Ivory]

Suicide is a topic that moves many. I love the line "Suicide kills more than one." I have been telling many people that lately. It's really strange how one person's death can effect so many people's lives, isn't it?

[Frieda P]

So true, and it does, the pain only gets transferred and scattered among the living....thanks so much for your kind review Siren.

[Ken Simm.]

Suicide kills more than one. That is the line. A special tribute.

[Blue Lotus]

this special butterfly will always live in your heart....
and the way you articulated this heartbreaking write
has me lost for words

[Lover Of Words]

This is so touching sad at heart renching only cause the thought of losing someone i care about is still fresh on my mind... This is a powerful read and i apprecaite you writing this... I think i know the meaning behind this and it touches me to the soul... Yet another breath takingly amazing piece...

[Jack...]

So very touching and sad. The pain of your words flowing from deep within your heart and soul hurts terribly to me. Some people review our poems and use the term "breathless' after reading this I find it hard to breathe, my chest tightens and my eyes see nothing as I feel your grief. very sad Frieda.

[Frieda P]

You're a sweet and caring soul Jack, I thank you for your friendship and warmth.