Sad Violin Tears

awarded 1st runner up in the Almost Anything writing contest... thanks!

...i vividly recall,

like sad violins

  i heard you cry

but a mere child 

      what could i do?

 you danced 

         with the devil,

we all paid the price

you kept us

      in harm's way

how could it be

         i needed to act

 the stronger of us

nevertheless,

   it taught me strength

each blow

 like a dagger to the heart,

blood pooled 

        around my feet

whilst you begged

for mercy

                    prayers 

 were never answered,

screams

 were never heard

          only the echoes 

         of violin tears

                   whilst I grew strong

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

There is little left for me to say by way of comments as you know me so well now and vice-versa...I can only send you notes to let you know that I've read your work and offer my ear (or eyes if you will) should it ever be needed...likewise, your writing is vivid and powerful enough that it does not require technical input...your voice is a breath of fresh air when positive, and a lightning rod of poignancy when negative, but both states transcend the page and penetrate the mind...you're the total package, to put it one way...I know you've had a rough few days and I hope that Frieda the dancing sensualist will return soon ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha, I just went from the deep psychotic to the dancing sensualist, gotta love this place! Thanks so much Steve, you give good review! ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure Frieda ;) xo

[Frieda P]

He lives!! ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha barely...real long week, and I still have another weekend to get through here ;P But I'm glad you remembered me while I was gone ;) xox

[Frieda P]

pfft as if! ;-P xo

[kublakhan27]

;) xox

[lee von cleef]

Trust in a instrument to speak... find the weak spot....lighten the heart....to a feather weight title...

[Frieda P]

I don't do feather weight, take it or leave it...

[lee von cleef]

Bantam ? or " have been his protest against the inroads of Egyptian thought?

No human being has the force of breath to stop the breath of life from passing; nor the force to set the day of dying: there is no escape from this assignation, no tricking death.

—Eccles. 8:8 [KJV & KB]"

[Frieda P]

Never thought of tricking death, now you're just messing with my head...

[lee von cleef]

on you toes,and quick too...smile on Friday.

[The 13th Eros]

I rarely read through words of suffering, dearest poet. I confess they make me drunk on sorrow. But seeing that you are brilliant, I shall take the chance to glimpse into this pool of darkness and listen to the violin weep. xx

[Frieda P]

Then I must thank you kindly for reading this one, I can only write what moves me in that moment, you are a lucky one if you can avoid suffering in life...xo

[The 13th Eros]

I have drunk too deep of suffering, dear queen. That's the rub. I write from dreams that lie deeper than the suffering... dreams no devil will ever take from me. xo

[Frieda P]

I'll take that under advisement...thanks, you're a sweetheart xo

[The 13th Eros]

I'm actually a little salty.. it's an acquired taste. ;)

[Frieda P]

Never did like sweets much, I'm much more into salty anyway ;-)

[The 13th Eros]

Good to smile on a Friday. Handing out samples later. ;)

[Frieda P]

Good to smile on any day, but fukitol Friday, it's a requirement ;-)

[The 13th Eros]

Smiling... everywhere. ;)

[Frieda P]

ha now that's some visual!

[The 13th Eros]

You're never fully dressed without a smile. :)))

[Frieda P]

:-D

[Lover Of Words]

This is so beautiful it brought me to tears the music does it justice and makes the piece that much more amazing!!! so lovely...

[Frieda P]

You're too kind sweet Kelsey, thanks so much....!

[Lover Of Words]

My pleasure!