Sad Violin Tears

awarded 1st runner up in the Almost Anything writing contest... thanks!

...i vividly recall,

like sad violins

  i heard you cry

but a mere child 

      what could i do?

 you danced 

         with the devil,

we all paid the price

you kept us

      in harm's way

how could it be

         i needed to act

 the stronger of us

nevertheless,

   it taught me strength

each blow

 like a dagger to the heart,

blood pooled 

        around my feet

whilst you begged

for mercy

                    prayers 

 were never answered,

screams

 were never heard

          only the echoes 

         of violin tears

                   whilst I grew strong

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

There is little left for me to say by way of comments as you know me so well now and vice-versa...I can only send you notes to let you know that I've read your work and offer my ear (or eyes if you will) should it ever be needed...likewise, your writing is vivid and powerful enough that it does not require technical input...your voice is a breath of fresh air when positive, and a lightning rod of poignancy when negative, but both states transcend the page and penetrate the mind...you're the total package, to put it one way...I know you've had a rough few days and I hope that Frieda the dancing sensualist will return soon ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha, I just went from the deep psychotic to the dancing sensualist, gotta love this place! Thanks so much Steve, you give good review! ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure Frieda ;) xo

[Frieda P]

He lives!! ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha barely...real long week, and I still have another weekend to get through here ;P But I'm glad you remembered me while I was gone ;) xox

[Frieda P]

pfft as if! ;-P xo

[kublakhan27]

;) xox

[Larry Dyson]

I used to say that prayers were not answered...but in my old age ..I renig and say..my wishes were not granted..perhapss my actions were induced to answer my own prayers?

[Frieda P]

Hmmm don't ask me, I don't believe in genie's either...thanks for the review!

[Ken Simm.]

Strings seem to bring out the saddest instincts. A plaintive write that seems from personal history.

[Frieda P]

Unfortunately yes Ken, thanks so much for your review.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

One of the very best poems I've ever read.

[Frieda P]

Wow Mehak, thanks for this lovely review!

[Mehak Mushtaq]

I mean it. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks again hun, much appreciated. :-)

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Anytime. :)

[Night]

Violins do make the saddest sounds it seems...an old wound I know, love you Frieda...=)

[Frieda P]

Nice to see your lovely face again David, love you too sweetie, thanks! xo

[Night]

Always a pleasure to see you Frieda...=)

[Frieda P]

Always a pleasure to have you David :-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I feel you slipping back to poetry dominated by the shaddows again. Your writing never fails to be wonderful but I personally like it better when you seem to have moved on to life as it can be for you.

[Frieda P]

I write it when I feel it John, shoot me ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey don't you tempt me but hey WE have gun laws so don't own one lol

[Frieda P]

hahaha you'd never shoot me, and you know it! ;-P

[Rogue]

A beautiful expression of painful circumstances. Your writing creates a very vivid image in this piece. I love the wording here, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Rogue.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You have painted a sad, yet beautiful write...I felt the perseverance within you growing strong, and that brought comfort to me as I read this.
Thank you for sharing this fragile work of art, a little piece of you..~xo~

[Frieda P]

Such a sweet response my dear friend, thank you so much. xo

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

It is sad that some kids have to grow up too early do to irresponsible parents. Childhood is a great experience.

[Frieda P]

It certainly should be Dale, some of us are not so fortunate, thanks for your kind words.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I realize that... but you can still be a kid at heart now.

[Frieda P]

Now you're starting to sound like John! ;-P

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Hey now I am me, no duplicates, no recreations :)))

[Frieda P]

well I was starting to hear blahblabhblah ;-)

Sorry my bad!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I will give you blah blah blah :p

[Frieda P]

:-D

[Tarry Franck]

Not sure if there is something wrong with me, but I find such beauty in this piece.

[Frieda P]

Well I take it to mean the words, not the circumstances Tarry, I get that...thanks so much.

[writing mojo]

I think these sentence strings can sever the thickest heart,within a ghost writer's cavity, the flow like "like a dagger to the heart blood pooled around my feet
whilst you begged for mercy prayers were never answered
screams were never heard only the echoes of violin tears whilst I grew strong" I am invested holey into the circulatory system of this humanly possible piece...good stuff

[Frieda P]

Always an interesting review mojo, thanks, I love it.