~I Take You in...

Follow me

              into this haven

       of serenity

feel my soul

           upon your lips

touch the breath

        of my fervor 

escape with me 

            to  surrender

       intoxicate my euphoria

             to release

       smother my exhilaration

            in exaltation

submit to the longing

          in my loins

       enter into my soft lightness

I take you in

             as a deep inhale

you splay the nape of

sweet gasping whispers 

               the world has moved

  anointed with nirvana's

                          

 sweet death

whilst entangled

                 in rapturous

                       pause

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

I did that in the hot tub last night...amazing how I can still get my feet up that high with the help of bubbling water ;-) I kneed myself in the nose a couple of times, hurt like hell...and one of the jets left an imprint on my left butt cheek...all in all, not my favorite position...at least doggy style I can still drink my drink...

Oh...did you write a poem? Hm...yes...it's quite lovely...quite lovely indeed...

[quinfinn]

damnit kimmers! i just spewed beer all over my keyboard!!!!!

[KAOlmsted]

xD

[Frieda P]

Holy cats!! ha, this has got to down in history as a review on the WC..and it's Featured!! You're a nutter, love you to pieces, thanks!

[KAOlmsted]

;-) Always my pleasure, ma'am...

[Frieda P]

Ha they didn't kick you out of AL yet? ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

Morgan and I decided to skip it...he left before 7 this morning. I slept until 9:30 ;-)

[Frieda P]

Oh sweet, you're having a mother/daughter day, is she drinking too? ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

She may as well be, I bought her a Mountain Dew this morning...the child is insane on Mountain Dew. I should just skip the middle man and mainline sugar and caffeine straight into her veins xD

[Frieda P]

Hahaha my poor little kimmer, she has no chance, no chance at all! Lol

[Androglossia]

Very sensual read Frieda. I can feel the whip of passion in each word. The photo is a plus. Artistic and beautifully classy.

[Frieda P]

'whip of passion' I may have to steal that from you Maryanne, thanks so much.

[Androglossia]

Not a problem:D

[Frieda P]

Now all I need is a picture ;-)

[Androglossia]

Haha!

[Tate Morgan]

You know Frieda all your passions might kill your average man lol

[Frieda P]

Good thing I don't know any 'average' men then eh? ;-)

[Tate Morgan]

I was assuming as much. You probably ruined all those men for any other woman lol

[N!LoC]

oh my !

[Frieda P]

Is that like lions and tigers and bears? :-)

[N!LoC]

hmmm more like cheetahs and panthers and cubs :-p

[Frieda P]

Lol ;-P

[Frieda P]

Just a masterpiece this is Frieda, I love the theme, the way you drip your words here as a rebirth, kind of feeling, to the end.... just fantastic, my favorite lines:

" intoxicate my euphoria
to release
smother my exhilaration
in exaltation"

Good one dear! X

[Frieda P]

Coming from you that means a lot to me, dear sister, thanks so much sweet Eli! xo

I so enjoyed the lyrical explosion.... so thank you big sis! :D

[Frieda P]

Doing the happy dance :-)

I dance with you hehehehe xoxo

[Frieda P]

now it's a party...woo xo

xoxox yeah!!!

[Claire Twinn]

I love the line:

I take you in

as a deep inhale

For me it symbolises complete abandonment and commitment- just lovely!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Claire, I'm glad you got that feel from it...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Sensual,Vivid and Captivating Poem...I love every words you expressed in this beautiful piece! :) even without the graphics :) great job! keep writing!

[Frieda P]

I am jazzing on your review Marc, thanks so much!

[Forgotten]

Wow now this was just something else, almost not sure what I'm supposed to say! Haha well you write in this amazing way that its graphic but not in your face at the same time is just so beautiful and eloquent the way you write, great job madam =D

[Frieda P]

I thank you kindly for the great review Forgotten, glad you enjoyed it. :-)

[Forgotten]

Oh I loved it, you have an amazing talent! My friend argues whether it's just a skill on an art, but you really do prove writing is an art valued to me just like any other :)

[quinfinn]

whew! i'm your huckleberry....

[Frieda P]

You and the noodle are starting to sound a lot alike ;-)

Thanks huckleberry...x

[quinfinn]

anytime/everytime

[Leigh]

You have managed to write graphically, but tastefully, with the rush of excitement, but with great measure and pace and those opposites balance this erotic poem out very well making it easy to take in too. I felt this was really natural written, explaining someone's inner feelings and desires with great accuracy.

[Frieda P]

Precious review, thanks so much leighgreen.

[Amanda K.]

Really love this...intense and eloquent.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Amanda.