Compromised Crucifixes

How to let go...

has always been the achilles heel

in matters of the heart 

as memories seep from a closed chapter

that perfect facade taken down

 by implosions of the mystery

familiarity can destroy,

 make or break the foundations

Dwelling in the comfort

 of sanctimonious dawdle

arrests the senses 

when fallacious promises give way,

compromised crosses

 prove malicious and destructive

writing your eternity's entry in blood

 has naught to do with love

Reviews

[Linda J. Harris]

Eternities entry in blood.
Has naught to do with love

I'm going out on a limb here.....
Jesus shed his blood by grace to give us everlasting life. All sinners are forgiven if they just ask. Our names are already written in heaven. It has all to do with the love of our Heavenly Father.

[Frieda P]

If that's your interpretation, feel free. Thanks for reading, much appreciated.

[KAOlmsted]

You know, I'm sitting here, trying to think if there is anyone, anyone at all in my past for whom I might feel this way and do you know what? I can't think of a single solitary soul. I don't know if that makes me the lucky one, because I have no laundry list of names of the ones that got away, or if that makes me truly pathetic because there have been no real everlasting loves in my life...just a series of "You'll do" ;-)

Interesting write, to say the least...

[Frieda P]

I'd say you're among the lucky few then, even as that young 15 year old girl, you never felt this way? I wish...

[KAOlmsted]

Ah, yes, of course, back then...BUT...we're talking about the 42 year old now ;-) And I know what I know so the pining is long gone.

[Frieda P]

You're lucky, I want to be just like you when I grow up. :-)

[KAOlmsted]

Take your Vitamin B(itch) and your Vitamin A(ttitude) and you'll grow up just like kimmer xD

[Frieda P]

ha...I have been, I guess I need more of that shyte, ha, imagine.....people would throw fookin rocks! ;-)

[Emerald Seas]

A true writing. Reading my mind are you?
Excellent

[Frieda P]

Ha, why does everyone ask me that question? I guess we are all very similar after all eh? Thanks so much Sera!

[Sheila Kline]

Dear Frieda,

I visualize two crosses - one that should align with the other because of what is expected from a relationship of love - that of a lover, or that of parents, or siblings. We are raised to trust, to have expectations that are perhaps "bred into" us. When these beliefs are shattered, it is then we are faced with the harsh reality of life and all its imperfections and injustices. One who trusts and is then led down the wrong path must deal with the aftermath - perhaps for a lifetime. Some are able to cope with these travesties, while others are not.

Your words, "writing your eternity's entry in blood has naught to do with love" reveals to me that these travesties are not justified. The symbolism of the crucifix bears witness to me of the depth of the violations of the faith and belief we have in the way it is supposed to be. The final entry is not always one done without love - just a way to bear the pain of carrying one's own cross. There are some things we shall never be able to understand!!

With compassion,
Sheila

[Frieda P]

Dearest Sheila, your words are always like a warm embrace to my heart...I thank you kindly sweet lady. x

[s y e]

You powerful lady! Holy fook, could you get any smarter? Wait... I know the answer....
YES YES a thousand times YES!!!

This was great, really well written, mama F!
"How to let go...
has always been the achilles heel"

My favourite lines, powerful lines
loved it all!

[Frieda P]

Ha, you're a nutter hon, that's why I love you!! Thanks so much you noodle ;-)

[s y e]

Yeah well, I love you too so we're all good!!! :-D heehe, anytime!

[Frieda P]

IMAGINE ;-)

[s y e]

;-D

[James Hanna-Magill]

Dear Frieda P

My oportunity to return the favour, when you have commented on my less serious and more irreverent and jaunty pieces, with my complete disregard to any sense of propriety, including the happiness of love.

Go, James!

1) Style and use of English? Rich, colourful and engaging. You use vocabulary that does not commonly from an easy part of the English Lexicon.

Yet it remains accessible to all. Much that we write (I write) can be interpreted on several levels, the most complex only we as writers know, to the simple experience and experience of the reader, whoever they may be.

Mark Twain's quote (Mr endlessly quotable for his humorous insight into life) once wrote (I paraphrase) "Classics? - Books people prasie but do not read."

Within that catalogue reside Malcolm Lowry (Under the Vocano) and James Joyce (Ulysses) always in anyone's top literay works of all time. They are unreadable.

The ideal in my view is to mix the literary with the readable.

Then you achieve both objectives.

Few have achieved it.

But in modern times, Daphne du Maurier has been one such in my perosnal opinion and that of others.

To prove the point, she is long dead, but all her books are still in print and at least 'Rebecca' and 'The Birds' Hitchcock turned into films; and

2) Content: I can be brief. I relate to it. How to let go of a relationship, which once gave so much joy, which we still remember, when it is on the rocks to the point of over. Been there. Perhaps we all have been. If we have as readers, we relate. If we haven't we are eduacted.

I rarely do brief reviews.

Why?

What I read often makes an impact. That inteneded. But often not. Yours has. It makes me reflect.

And if that is so, in your case, it has just done so to full effect.

With my respect and all my kindness as ever

James Hanna-Magill

[Frieda P]

Such an intriguing, delightful review James, I think I might like it better than my poetry! Thanks so much...

[James Hanna-Magill]

Dear Frieda

I respect you enormously and your talent as a writer.

I enjoy it when I am challenged, especially by you.

I love how you engage in critique.

I do love revieiwing, hence my rather undeserved status as Top Reviewer on this site.

But if I do, or I am, it is because, I love bathing in the beauty of others ideas, who that implies they are and life's relevance to us all.

Whilst I continue to seek to improve as a writer and get more of my writing published than I already have, I am inspired by others writing and learn from them, as I do from you. In my own way I hope to teach too in my writing.

There is a part of me before and even more so after I became ill with bipolar disorder, which makes me realise I care deeply about the other, those I rub shoulders with every day and their joys and suffering.

Sorry if I sound like an angel. But the words 'I CARE' mean so much to me.

With all due respect, kindess and my thanks as ever

James

[Frieda P]

You humble me with your kindness James, the fact that you 'care' comes through in every word...I'm delighted that I've come to know you and experience your heart's compassion.

[Larry Dyson]

yes , im afraid thet "Imagine" is all we are doing at this time...

[Frieda P]

thanks for your thoughts EM.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

There are some who have no loyalty or sense of commitment... I do think this world of fast paced technology leaves many with no focus.
Very well done poem. A masterpiece of emotion.

[Frieda P]

You've said a mouthful right there Dale, thanks so much for your kind review my friend.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Good thing I said it yesterday cause today my mouth is full of dog hair, LOL

[Frieda P]

Hahahahaha Cheers!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Shhhh, not so loud :p

[Frieda P]

I'll try to keep it down. ;-)

[Pax]

How to let go... has always been the achilles heel in matters of the heart ~ spoken with much conviction, true words from you my friend... a heartfelt piece!

[Frieda P]

I think this happens to a lot of people Pax, thanks for your kindness.

[DIVYA]

There are people who sweep us away from life itself with false promises and a lot of deception. Their names will be written in blood in the book of love, but for all the wrong reasons.

I am awed at the accuracy and direct way in which you hit on the truth with the exact words. Compliments Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Ha, 'the book of love'...I think mine expired. ;-)

Thanks for this lovely review Divya!

[DIVYA]

:) You know you are always welcome Frieda! ;)