Compromised Crucifixes

How to let go...

has always been the achilles heel

in matters of the heart 

as memories seep from a closed chapter

that perfect facade taken down

 by implosions of the mystery

familiarity can destroy,

 make or break the foundations

Dwelling in the comfort

 of sanctimonious dawdle

arrests the senses 

when fallacious promises give way,

compromised crosses

 prove malicious and destructive

writing your eternity's entry in blood

 has naught to do with love

Reviews

[Linda J. Harris]

Eternities entry in blood.
Has naught to do with love

I'm going out on a limb here.....
Jesus shed his blood by grace to give us everlasting life. All sinners are forgiven if they just ask. Our names are already written in heaven. It has all to do with the love of our Heavenly Father.

[Frieda P]

If that's your interpretation, feel free. Thanks for reading, much appreciated.

[Debbie_Philly]

Your work is always beautiful and powerful..... so much punch packed into 2 stanzas.... love love love this !!

[Frieda P]

You're most gracious, thanks so much for this great review, so happy you felt this one!

[Debbie_Philly]

I did... and its hard not to.... very deep !! :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks again Debbie, and once I get through some more RR's, I'll be sure to return the favor...

[quinfinn]

truly spoken and deliberately poignant. did you mean "destroy" in line seven? i love your writes, frieda p.....they always speak to the heart of me.

[Frieda P]

Yes of course, thanks for the head's up quin, hate when that happens.

Entirely too many people can relate, it's sad really, thanks huckleberry.

[Ohhhwillow]

The last two lines create a frame for the entirety of the poem, for me. There is clarity of thought here, as I found with your chosen structure it was a veiled, though still very beautiful. You have, in my eyes, a very lovely vocabulary!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, I'm glad that brought it home for you...much appreciate the review.

[first second third]

this is very good!! it flows as nateral as a steam and the way the wors are outstanding, it made my heart feel the true emotion to this. fabulouse write!:)

[Frieda P]

I love when you can 'feel' the words, can't ask for more than that, thanks!

[lee von cleef]

She could of just said "The Novelty wore off" But then the Blood, The Eternity, when all he wants is now.

[Frieda P]

Much too simple lee! Thanks...

[David Scott]

I find religion has twisted a polluted perfect love. Your poem shows the misdirection theology has taken. Love does require fidelity and obedience of the heart that knows such devotion. Evil requires blood and fire. It is sin that bleeds the eternal life out of humanity. We know love when we see it and we are never fooled for long by cheap substitutes found in religious doctrines.
Wonderful write. Sorry if I got preachy, but this subject is a life and death matter that has eternal echoes. Thank you adressing this touchy subject.
Next you will write about politics I fear. Ha. ;)

[Frieda P]

Always an interesting review from you Mr. Scott, please shoot me if I start writing about politics by the way! ;-)

[redflutterby]

Wow....can't even comment because the feelings have floored me. Sitting here teary eyed. Im never short on words either...

[Frieda P]

Wow, I'm truly touched by your review A.M. thanks so much.

[Pete Langley]

As a man longwed - and now widowed from - a `good` woman, I`m no expert on breakdown of relationships. All the fractures in absolute oneness that you describe in this poem happened to us at various times, I think if I`m honest, but underpinning those problems we always had a backstop - the trust that comes from real admiration for each other. That built- and rebuilt - trust several times I think. Whether it would have been better to part at any time, I just don`t know. The grass is always greener....P.

[Frieda P]

I hear you Pete, there are always going to be ups & downs in any relationship, it's making it through one storm at a time, unless of course there's broken trust, not many have the fortitude to hang in there, kudos to you my friend.

[Sami Khalil]

A good poem that talks about lost love and its meaning written in blood and sacrifice and the pains that come in the end. That is a compromised love indeed and we all have felt its effects on the heart.
Another of your great writes...:)

[Frieda P]

I know many have been in that situation, thanks for your kind thoughts Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Lover Of Words]

knocked me off my feet agian!!!!!! Amazing

[Frieda P]

Thanks Kels.

[Lover Of Words]

Your welcome