Etching My Mind

Midnight embraces, 

   moonlight walks

      twilight kisses

long talks til dawn

you fill my nights with rhapsody

when i hold you up to the sun

your enticing words whisper to me

bewitchingingly beckon,

          til they implode desire

days are hazy until dipped into dark

within the inky black I see you clearly

eyes wide open in anticipation

hearts meshing, bodies thrashing

taste of blood upon my lips,

etching my mind with lusty fingertips

melt your inscription upon my skin

whilst we share poetry of our souls

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

I liked this a lot, but I have to tell you I can't stop laughing at my silly self because when I just glanced at the title in my RR queue it looked like it was called "Bitching My Mind" and I was like, FTW is she going to write about now?? xD So...very enticing write, but I did giggle my way through it ;-)

[Frieda P]

I can't stop laughing now, funny you should read 'bitching' when you see my name!! lol ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

Don't need to be Freud to figure that one out! xD

[Frieda P]

Bhahaha, that bit got you Featured!

[KAOlmsted]

Holy cats! :-D

[luviva]

my dear, this is a class A write,
the rhyme and alliterations just make you flow with the flow, felt like i was flowing along this river tide. love the way you write and admire you...
continue pouring that ink, for the fruits are great.

[Frieda P]

You humble me with your kindness luviva, thanks so much.

[luviva]

because YOU ARE WORTH IT....

[Annabelle Lee]

I could almost sense a set of alliteration there but then brushed it off, the way I read your poetry is not alliterate, it's just that it's so easy to emphasize the vowels, and it sounds amazing when read aloud even If I've not an understanding of What it's about.

[Frieda P]

You having a hard time understanding me Annabelle Lee, that's okay, as long as you enjoyed it....thanks.

[DIVYA]

I just loved the blood and the lust! The spirited love behind the passion!
Compliments Frieda, for the superb rendition on love and passion!

[Frieda P]

Muchly appreciate this one Divya, grazie!

[Kajal Gulabani]

Super duper beauty.. Amazing end to the piece. Great work.

[Frieda P]

I kind of liked the end part too, thanks Kajal! :-)

[Jack...]

Once again my answer is ...YES!

Very nice Frieda. You poetry is like dice, roll them and you really do not know what will come up. There are so many dimensions to your work it is exciting to me to see what you will bring us next. Everything is different and unique in your own specail way.

[Frieda P]

Good analogy Jack, the dice roll is kind of what it feels like in my head....thanks so much.

[icelandicblue]

You have created a compelling intensity in this poem. Your ending crescendos beautifully. I love the concept of sharing the poetry of our souls. It's a wonderful poem.

[Frieda P]

Oh one of my favorite words 'crescendos' thanks so much for this one!

[Carolann Dowsett]

So beautiful, so full of longing and passion. If only. :)

[Frieda P]

Ha I know, it all looks good on paper right? ;-)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes it certainly does. :)

[kelvin]

very nice writing here for you started out gentle and slowly and in the end there went a rush of nicely worded flows coming together this is a very poem of sheer beauty.
eyes wide open in anticipation
hearts meshing, bodies thrashing
taste of blood upon my lips,
etching my mind with lusty fingertips
melt your inscription upon my skin
whilst we share poetry of our souls...... Hot spit there keep it coming haha

[Frieda P]

Haha there's that 'hot spit' again...you're making a mess of my place kelvin! ;-)

[kelvin]

hahaha that's right hot spit now you're getting it.

[Tate Morgan]

You are an inordinately happy soul Freida Thats a joy most never know and a treasure many seek all their lives fruitlessly

[Frieda P]

Don't believe everything you read Tate, thanks....

[Yellow Butterfly]

Picture + Words = Beautiful Poetry.... Fp


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