Dancing in the Madness of Sweet Psycho

It was a prolific day i lost my sanity

       splendiferous beyond compare

i lay back in violaceous grassy knolls

    breathless, you sent me over the edge

stars were bursting in symbiotic ecstacy

              moons lie pale in comparison

living for the danger of your toxicity

            your sharp as a knife cuts, abysmal

within my sinful soul's lustfulness

          strap me in hysteria's restraints  

if this is what deranged feels like,

          i felicitously breathe in delirium

pain and pleasure the paradisiacal tonic

             i ache for you like my next fix

you brought out my sweet psycho

             touched by your trenchant reality

marinate me in your juices

         if this is madness, i maniacally acquiesce

let me savor  in this chimera

                  i'll dance this crazed frenzy endlessly

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

let me savor in this chimera
i'll dance this crazed frenzy endlessly
chimeras....wow. intriguing usage in this poem. (Tam goes happily off on a daydream about chimeras....) There was a specific "heat" to this piece too. YUP! Twas awesome.

[Frieda P]

Wow don't know how I missed this awesome review, you're too kind TL!

[Annabelle Lee]

I am amazed at your vast vocabulary. Sometimes it seems as if you are just showing it off to us. THis poem had a fantastic rhythm to it. how a subtle line is followed by a line beginning exaggerated and suddenly subtle again is nearly lyrical

[Frieda P]

Ha you make me smile Annabelle Lee, I love words, try to learn a new one each and every day, thanks for your sweet review....

[Annabelle Lee]

Aha. I make do with the ones I've already been in relation with

[s y e]

This was spectacular! My, my you ARE good at breaking the rules, aren't you? ;-P Haha. I loved the word play, had to look alot of words up but shhhhhhh, no one needs to know.

"marinate me in your juices"

Very nice ;) Loved the imagery too!

[Frieda P]

Ha glad you liked that line noodlebumble and I'll never tell! :-)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I love the wordplay in this one...you broke all the rules and then wrote your own, which is what I think is important for a really good writer. I hate to see poets who don't take chances, and you my friend definitely take chances. I think what struck me the most was how packed full of "image words" this one was...beautifully written.

[Frieda P]

Ha I've always been good at breaking the rules, who knew it would serve me well one day, much appreciate this glowing review my friend!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Yes, it does serve you well! You break rules in the most beautiful way...a compliment only an artist can recieve I think. :)

[Corset]

Oh Pickle this is insanely beautiful, marinate me in your juices...oh wonder writer, consider me soy and pear!

[Frieda P]

Holy 'insanely beautiful' put me over the edge, thanks! Ha, love the pears, soy, not so much ;-)

[Corset]

have you never eaten kobei short ribs w/steamed white rice ? did not like? Surely you jest.

[Frieda P]

Hmmm what's that got to do with soy hon? ;-)

[Corset]

Korean kobei marinade is soysauce & pear juice, and it's very yummy :)

[Pax]

i see indulgence in your words ~ then lets dance this crazed frenzy endlessly in your poetry ~ *dancing crazily here* :D ~ you are brilliant my friend !

[Frieda P]

Ha, so glad you're dancing crazily with! Thank you dear Pax, much appreciated my friend ;-)

[Barbara Walker]

Love the imagery in this! That's a good kind of crazy!

[Frieda P]

Yes it is, thanks Barbara!

[Baby Ricochet]

I did that the other day. Good one

[Frieda P]

Ha, seems I write them, you live them Mark! Thanks so much...

[kublakhan27]

Now this is the Frieda I know and love ;P I wouldn't have needed to see your name to know that this was penned by you...and the avatar? Awesomeness ;P

[Frieda P]

Awh you're awesomesauce yourself Benji! Thanks ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure Mrs. R ;P

[Frieda P]

Dance me to the end of love? ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Anytime my dear...you'd have to lead though cuz I can't dance ;P

[Frieda P]

Ha try and stop me. ;-P

[kublakhan27]

I wouldn't think of it ;P

[Kristin Lee]

I like it! A frantic dance on the edge of crazy where everything is sweeter, if only for a minute. Great words and use of them.

[Frieda P]

Yes, if only for a moment in time, thanks Kristin, much appreciate it.