Dining with a Side of Heimlich

The words and feelings that are sorted jambalaya

     like a slow cooker they steam and churn

burnt offerings of the most selective cuts

      adding spice and touches of old seeping memories

there seems to be no end to the feast of negativity

       written in crocks of smiles, still can't toast it just right

when you've been half baked and fried to death

     roasting at excessive high heat and drenched in hot sauce

             it's hard to swallow the sweet essence of life's flavors

serve it up with crusty bread and wine to the guests

          they have no clue what they've imbibed

would they choke on the horse of a different color

          if they knew they just dined on sacrificial lamb

supper is tastefully served with a side order of Heimlich 

Reviews

[DCT ponderings]

What a powerful metaphor Frieda. Have you ever seen the movie Something to talk About? There is a scene where Julia Roberts talks about sitting their politely smiling while she is served up copious amounts of BS, like a good southern girl. There are times you need the Heimlich indeed.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for this glowing review DCT, I haven't but I will certainly make it a point to catch it now...I love her.

[Frieda P]

By the way, I"m not Southern, Italiano and Southern gals are worlds apart :-)

[DCT ponderings]

I'm from Philly so I know you Miss Italiano. You dish it up passionately, loudly and without abandon. My favorite type of food.

[Frieda P]

Ciao neighbor, so you do know :-)

[DCT ponderings]

si si! :))

[Tai Ryens]

I don't really get the vibe of lying that a couple writers below me had outright stated in their reviews, but rather anxiety. An anxiety in which nothing has gone according to plan, and said man strangling on the words has managed to turn the antidote (to what? who knows!) into a poison by choking on it; fumbling for the precise words to say to the mistress across the table. A Heimlich would not save the man, ironically, only another person will.

[Frieda P]

Actually Tai it's about people who turn their heads to what's truly being served up....

[Tai Ryens]

Ah, well, I do tend to blame myself often. Very fine poem indeed.

[Frieda P]

Don't think you'd turn your back on the blatant truth my friend.....

[Shane Winchester]

A very sly metaphor. Sometimes we confuse the poison for the antidote. Nice work Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Glad you enjoyed my little rant, thanks Shane.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Talk about wordplay! Great job here, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Woo, jazzed by your review hero, thanks!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

You more than earn any praise you recieve. You are a brilliant writer.

[Frieda P]

Truly humbled by your words, many thanks again.....

[Pete Langley]

Oh, you`ve cooked something good up here alright, Frieda! This is gutsy cordon bleu stuff served in a truckers` diner to satisfy the palate of the fussiest metaphor muncher! I won`t have to eat for a week! P.

[Frieda P]

I just so happen to be an excellent cook Pete, thanks! :-)

[Zahra]

if they knew they just dined on sacrificial lamb


clever and deep, well penned my friend. :)

[Frieda P]

Ha, thanks Zahra, actually lamb is a favorite of mine, here it's served cold. :-)

[Leslie Philibert]

like this too, and as someone who lives in Germany greatly enjoyed the Germanic Heimlich ( secret !), a poem with style and wry humour...

[Frieda P]

Ha Leslie, your secret is safe with me...thanks!

[Traci]

This is such a great metaphorical piece. I feel each word you’ve written, the humor is a nice diversion from the sadness, negativity, loss, and proverbial sacrificial lamb.

"there seems to be no end to the feast of negativity
written in crocks of smiles, still can't toast it just right
when you've been half baked and fried to death
roasting at excessive high heat and drenched in hot sauce
it's hard to swallow the sweet essence of life's flavors"

favorite stanza, very powerful words.

[Frieda P]

Some days you need humor just to get through all the stuff that gets jammed down our throats, thanks Traci!

[Traci]

Laughter is our best medicine, and you, my friend always bring your wonderful sense of humor here to lighten the mood, brighten our days, so thank YOU!!

[Dean Kuch®]

Not everyone is who they pretend to be. If I have learned anything in life, I've learned that much, especially from some of my supposed 'friends' here, on WC.

This reminded me of that old saying, "Revenge is a dish best served cold." I like to believe that's true. I see no reason to pretend to be someone other than who I am. I like me, just the way I am. When treated with respect, I meter it with respect in return. Being 'YOU', that's what it's really all about, isn't? it Metallica says so, and I happen to like Metallica too! Great write here, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Hear, hear...and who could possibly argue with Metallica? Thanks Dean!

[annie lee]

I love this sardonic tone. You will serve the same to all who gather at your table but offer the sensitive service of Heimlich for those who find themselves choking. Am I close? Lots of writers would condemn the chokers and coughers and bid them choke on their own vomit as they leave; they would suffer no fools. But I think who are we to know the fools from those who will drink your wine with no quibble? Perhaps in offering your treat to all who care to try, you snatch a fool back from the mouth of derision. The razor edges of these lines dare the reader to choke. It is a wonderful read. Brava.

[Frieda P]

How I love to read your review my friend, you always read me so well, grazie mille!