~Cathartic

Bare your soul,

spill your blood on white pages

relinquish tears from thine eyes

purge your sins, unburden your heart

If thy pen finds nirvana

to write the light of day,

the darkness of night 

reads a lighter shade of gray

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

I absolutely LOVE the last stanza! Not that the first is chopped liver; it is beautiful in its own way. But since I am a practicing Buddhist, the last stanza rings clear to me and true. Wonderful job of evoking emotions from the reader with this piece.

[Frieda P]

I didn't know you were a Buddhist Lori, no wonder you're so serene, and thanks so much.

[Ravyne Hawke]

I've been practicing Buddhism for about 10 years now.. with some Hinduism, Taoism and Native American Shamanism tossed in to keep me focused.

[David Scott]

I agree. I just love seeing the dark writes that purge the soul... For one thing, I know I am not alone and a complete cray cray... For another reason, I see my friends reaching a point where they understand their pain or at least own it enough to put it in a place where they can deal with it. Kind of like mopping up the vomit, instead of walking around on it all day everyday.
Depth is found in the brevity of this write.

[Frieda P]

Thanks David, you put quite the spin on it, the vomit was a nice touch! Lol...seriously, thanks for your insight and thoughts here...glad you feel that way, I do an awful lot of purging...

[David Scott]

It is what it is... Last time I checked, everybody still poops. A favorite children's book BTW.

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, yes I've read it...girls don't by the way. ;-)

[David Scott]

*snickering*

[Astro]

I like that final thought a lot Frieda. This one is great. We all need to divest ourselves of hidden demons every once and awhile. Keeping the darkness balled up too long makes us go batty. Well done.

[Frieda P]

I concur, I'd go bobinz if I didn't purge, thanks Asto.

[Astro]

You're welcome!

[s y e]

"relinquish tears from thine eyes
purge your sins, unburden your heart"

These lines just popped out the screen when I came on to this page, This is short and to the point, awesome job.

[Frieda P]

Thanks noodlebumble, glad you enjoyed this one!

[Onku Ghosh]

A concise poem with an apt title.YOur words are so true - we writers find nirvana through writing......we bare our souls, unburden our hearts in the action of writing.
An excellent little poem.

[Frieda P]

So glad you enjoyed this one Onku, thanks so much.

[Emily B]

i wonder about the generations of blood, how they would look all drawn on the same page . . . where do my sins overlap those of my mother and grandmother . . . .

I am darkness
and light

lovely words

[Frieda P]

Hmm, that's a bloody thought Emily.

[Emily B]

blood is pumping, on its way to be filtered and cleaned and returned

[Cassie]

I enjoyed this, now shelved in my library

[Frieda P]

Woo, thanks Cassie!

[Troy Henson]

Spilling blood on white pages as we find nirvana in the pen as we write. I love this piece Frieda. Short and to the point.
Very well done.
Regards
Troy

[Frieda P]

Jazzed you did Troy, I like that idea too...thanks so much.

[Rita L. Sev]

LOVE this, Frieda! Finding nirvana through the pen... perfect. And yes, the dark lightens up with every poem... (and, hey - you rhymed a little!) ;)

[Frieda P]

Purely by accident Rita :-) Thanks, here's to nirvana.

[Karen]

Beautiful poem! That second stanza is amazing! I love the idea of finding nirvana through my pen! If that were the case, I'd be the happiest, wealthiest, holiest person in the world! Hahaha! Thanks again for continuing to write and share!

[Frieda P]

Haha smiling here Karen....nirvana on! Thanks so much!