Slow Burn

Time has been

 unkind to the heart

with each ache

 another piece falls

into an open pit of the abyss

       cinders of burning ashes

       fiery embers of the past,

 crushing smoke's suffocation

have proved to make it

 impossible

to breathe

 or love         another

I heard the cries of smoldering love 

               dying a a slow death

                  the essence of black roses

                       laid to rest

burial would have been a much kinder fate

Reviews

[Tom]

A somewhat somber poem but no less intriguing for it, looks as if the wounds caused by life's trails impinged deeply and have now taken their toll on the weary subject and they seem beyond any kind of remedial therapy too mend this broken heart !

Beautifully penned poem, soulfully scribed !

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your lovely review Tom!

[Pax]

after a sad end of any relationship, it doesn't mean your dead... perhaps the broken heart laid to a slumbering sleep with nothing to wake the aching need of second chance... perhaps someday, someone will come and wake the sleeping rose... a beautiful piece, though really sad...

[Frieda P]

No it doesn't Pax, you just feel that way sometimes, thanks so much for your insightful review, good to see you again my friend...

[Pax]

your most welcome.... its good to read a wonderful piece of my friend ms. F....

[shallimarRose]

Picture inspired?
Beautiful form and lines Freida.
"I heard the cries of smoldering love
dying a a slow death
the essence of black roses
laid to rest"

so sad... xo

[Frieda P]

Ha, no life inspired...Thanks shallimar x

[shallimarRose]

Awww.. Well I knew that but for me sometimes a photo will jar my muse... (muse getting lazy lately)
well done. xo

[Frieda P]

True, sometimes it happens that way, this time I had to go searching for one that fit, thanks again....

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I know I can relate... after my divorce nothing could stop the heartache. The way you put it into words is superb.
The heart is resilient though, a miracle of sorts.

[Frieda P]

I guess you're right Dale, since most of us have lived through it, and survived, saving grace for us is we can write about it, thanks!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

True that Moonbean, You are welcome.

[redflutterby]

Sigh....burial may have been kinder but I prefer you here!! You found the mark with this one..yet nothing is impossible hun. That's my story and I'm sticking to it.. ;-pxo

[Frieda P]

Burn baby, burn...seems that way for a lot of us eh? ;-P Thanks Red! x