Echoes of your stare...

I drank from your cup of darkness

     my lips turned cobalt blue

the shadows whirl'd engulfing,

   your piercing eyes pour'd into me

there was no taste left for breath

i lie gasping, waiting for a miracle

   only thing i could hear,

      was the echo of your stare.......

Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

"the echo of your stare", great line to end this poem Frieda.. I would say back away from that"cup of darkness", but probably too late for that huh.. I don't think there are miracles for these shadows, just our own resilience and the help of friends who would shout Breathe Frieda, Breathe.. one of those wonderful poems you write that tears at our hearts... ~~redzone

[Frieda P]

No hope for the darkness, now you tell me, I'm fook'd. Thanks curt, always appreciate your thoughts. Are you ready yet sir? ;-)

[redzone]

remember that song "Anticipation"?? well that me.. all nerves and silliness.. the real question is and will always be.. "ARE YOU READY FOR ME!!!! this is way too much fun Frieda...

[joshua sky]

Love can be so dangerous. Or seemingly so. Adventure is love and vice-versa. I find adventure in this poem interestingly enough, insomuch as the love portrayed, from what I can see, enraptured the individual to a different level; whether it be high or low. This work does a good job in showing there is no stasis in love. Excellent write my friend...

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for this glowing review joshua, much appreciated.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

That stare- an invitation to drink in the cup of darkness. Sometimes, it's just irresistible, but why not try to close our eyes? LOL

This is brilliant in such few words, Frieda. =)

[Frieda P]

Haha I might miss something Dhaye! Thanks, why is your account closed, not leaving I hope.....

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I just tried... just like in my room, when I leave even for a while, I do close it. LOL.

[Frieda P]

You need a sign or something, gone fishing, be back soon. hahah

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I can read you. Thanks. Maybe I'll think of the most apt sign next time. lol

[Danny]

Nicely penned!
"I drank from your cup of darkness" - I love this part especially :) :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your visit and review Danny. :-)

[Jack...]

All I can say is if those eyes belonged to you sweet poet, those echo's would be the most beautiful music to my ears. Always blown away by your words Frieda. This one will stay with me as I journey through the night.

P.S. you are welcome to stare at me anytime you like.

[Frieda P]

Ahhh you flatter me sir...thanks Jack.

[Jack...]

Ok, now I have listened...very cool...listen to that keyboard...wow, I love this...just a little piece, that's all it takes sometimes to fade the empty hollows of the mind and fill them with music. Walking, slowly, street lights flutter on shadowed wings, touching my wrist in anticipation of sidewalk silhouettes and the park bench with that always contagious cup...waiting...steam hypnotizing, rising, epitomizing this on a cold morning before the sun startles the ravens...and still Leonard sings.....................................

[Frieda P]

Wow, you need to write that one Jack.....................!

[Rita L. Sev]

Intensely dark and heavy, Frieda. I can feel the desolation in this one. Is there any emotion you cannot evoke with your poetry?

[Frieda P]

You certainly made my morning with this review Rita, I'm so jazz'd you enjoyed, I'm quite fond of this one myself, when does that ever happen?

[Lydia Shutter]

Heart wrenching emotion in this one. Why do we allow ourselves to drink from "the cup of darkness" offered up by far too many people? We should refuse it no matter how thirsty we are, but alas, it seems we never learn. Where is that miracle when you plead with the heavens above for it? Sometimes you have to make your own miracles, my friend. Intensely written wonderful work. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

I'm trying Lydikey, I'm trying! Thanks my sweet, wise friend, thought you'd have the answers to that one.........

[Nicole Williams]

Oh my, this gave me goosebumps. Beautifully penned Ms Frieda, I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your visit and lovely review Kora.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Your descriptions are always so vivid.Your words are simply divine.Well penned Lady Freida :)

[Frieda P]

You know I love that word 'divine'...thanks so much my friend! :-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Of course you are welome :0

[Frieda P]

Okay enough of the serious stuff, you ready to get loaded? ;-P Cheers..........

[Vidya Bacchus]

You need to ask? Fook yeah!!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. I like the description create vision of darkness and no light. I like the use of vision and sound to give life to your words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Sometimes darkness is alluring, thanks Coyote.

[Ahena MK]

there was no taste left for breath
i lie gasping, waiting for a miracle
only thing i could hear,
was the echo of your stare.......

wonderful read!!!
101/100 :)

[Frieda P]

2X's............thanks muchly ;-)