~Darkly Dancin'

Fallen under a darkly cast spell

eerie spectral vibrations in my bones

music compos'd upon churchly organs

rushing shivers up my uncompromising spine,

demons playing charades on blacken'd keys

heart bleeds a dull beryl hue of expir'd crimson 

mind whirling in sickly remuneration tunes  

dance track takes flight without raven's hindsight

commission'd by devil's own apathetic self  

Author's Note

Reviews

[s y e]

// music compos'd upon churchly organs
rushing shivers up my uncompromising spine,
demons playing charades on blacken'd keys
heart bleeds a dull beryl hue of expir'd crimson //

Wow chicka, I knew you could write but this takes it to a whole other level! This was so dark I could hardly see. And the music.... Sent shivers up my spine.

You've blown me away... Wow. Flip flops & all that jazz!!

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd it had the intended effect noodlebumble....wooo, more flip flops, it's gonna be a good day! ;-)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Epic poem. Love the darkness in it.

Your's truly Kaze~

[Frieda P]

Ahhh Epic, love that word, thanks muchly Kaze....

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome Frieda. :)

[Raymond Federle]

Wonderfully dark, gothic and beautiful! This is my fav kind of poem. Music is excellent! Well done indeed. :)

[Frieda P]

Thank you so much Raymond, doing the happy dance!

[Michael Thrower]

You ALWAYS have the most epic music. That sounds just like Nox Arcana.

[Frieda P]

Hey Michael, long time no see, thanks...jazz'd you enjoyed.

[Michael Thrower]

It has been a while. I'm trying to recover from my long absence and abused account. Kind of hard. Plus, not many people are on here like there used to be. Not many at all.

[Michael Thrower]

OH! I just saw the title of that song, Adrian! He's very popular in fantasy music. I'm actually friends with him on facebook. If you'd like, I can show this to him. I'm sure he would be thrilled to see someone used his music for something so beautiful.

[Frieda P]

Sure, tell him I love it..............

[Frieda P]

And yes I know a lot of people I started here with are gone now, it's too bad really...

[Michael Thrower]

Done! :) I'll let you know what he says. I linked the poem and everything.

[Michael Thrower]

I hardly know the new crowd, but it seems to consist of a 12-15 year old audience. I miss the old wave of people here. It was a flower blooming wild. Now it's hardly even a flower.

[Frieda P]

Awh, you really make it sound pathetic...there's kids here but there's also some excellent poets that survived, you need a new friend list ;-)

[Michael Thrower]

I've seen a few. And I really do. 4/5 of them haven't been online in forever.

[kublakhan27]

Well...anytime I see a piece from you with dancing in the title, a reading and review cannot be delayed haha My jaw weighs a ton in the aftermath of reading this...I'm still trying to lift it up. And I'm still vibrating from the reverberations of line two in my mind. I love this piece to death...dance on Mrs.R...to the end of love ;) xo

[Frieda P]

Wooo, your review blew my skirt up Benji, I had to check what line two said that sent you reeling...ha, ya had to throw Cohen in there too eh, now I'm really over the moon! ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'm sure I have a big goofy grin on right now Mrs.R...or my jaw is still sore...something is making my face sore haha ;P I thought I'd toss him in there for insurance just in case I didn't blow it up myself hahaha ;) xo

[Frieda P]

Hahaha, you did the job, Leonard was just a bonus Benji ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Whew, I'm relieved ;) xo

[redflutterby]

DARK..is the word in this one. I got chills reading it and not the good kind. Id much rather tango under a summer moon then take a whirl to this music...sigh...

By the way is it supposed to be fight or flight? ;-)

[Frieda P]

Ha you big baby, tango under the summer moon, now that's an entirely different poem Red...or is it riding hood? ;-) Yes, flight, how did I miss that, thanks muchly!

[redflutterby]

Moi...a big baby...you no better!! Just call me little red riding hood.... ;-p

[Frieda P]

Speaking of, when you writing that riding hood kraken? ;-P

[redflutterby]

Ha....dont rush my muse...shes a little kranky lately!! ;-pp

[Frieda P]

So write a kranky kraken............

[Brittany Zedalis]

Ooo, this is dark and I really like it. The video you have along with it scared the hell out of me when it started automatically playing, hahaha. Thank you for posting! :)

[Frieda P]

Haha, sorry about that...I should post a warning eh? Thanks so much Brittany, glad you liked it ;-)

[Brittany Zedalis]

You're welcome :)

[Odysseus Wanders]

Yeah! This rocks. When I first went to look, I was, oh oh, music... so often when i hear music in the presentation, there are lyrics, and i wrestle with them to read, so ultimately turn off said music... But this was great. Reading was not only possible, but enhanced by the music. It feels as if the music wrote the poetry, and you gave it shape. I imagined the writer working over the craft to the hammering hollow tones of the bone machine. And as the organ played, the poem was hammered out like the player to the keys of the organ itself. Its lends this element of almost seeing the writer write. Fun work. Great capture of a mood. Ha, and then I gave it another listen, but from my real system, not the cpu, and... that's the way to go. I feel entertained. Thank you. Nice work.

[Frieda P]

Wow, I like your review better than my poem. I understand about the music, sometimes I feel that way too, but there's always the option to shut it down, jazz'd you enjoy'd my dark side neighbor....thanks so much Terry.

[Odysseus Wanders]

I'm half shadow... all the time;)

[Frieda P]

Shady, hahaha ;-)

[Scott Metro]

I knew my spell would work....lol

demons playing charades on blacken'd keys
That line is magnificent....well done.
A beautiful bite of brimstone....
Admiration
Scott

[Frieda P]

Ha, was it the spell alas? Brimstone and fire, that's me my pretty...thanks Scott ;-)

[Scott Metro]

..always my dear..
Scott

[Pryde Foltz]

commission'd by devil's own apathetic self

I often wonder if the true demon lies in apathy as it allows so much injustice.

A wonderfully chilling write, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

I would say so Pryde....apathy and indifference mean that people just don't give a damn....they turn their heads to so many wrongdoings. Thanks for your thoughts here.

[Stella Armour]

dark vibrations here alright Frieda... gorgeously deep and haunting....

[Frieda P]

Thanks Stella, jazz'd you enjoy'd the dark side....

[Stella Armour]

i love the "dark" side Frieda..

[Frieda P]

Ahhh woman after my own heart...

[Stella Armour]

have a read of my latest poem Frieda....it's "Dark"

[Frieda P]

Will do...............