Cobalt Rattlings Duo

COLLABORATION ~ kublakhan & Frieda

Cobalt rattlings in gray matter
spun in Dali quintessence
ramblings encapsulated of time
palatalization of vapor'd history
Cobalt chord sequences infiltrate
the ears of the introspective poet   
powerless to blind the senses
in conscientious retroaction
Connection to the self a live wire
Loose sparks spraying danger in a dare
Ambition shivering in cold sweat
crumbles in the subconscious
like a flustered ball of ink-soiled paper
Mockingbird taunts thought gravity
monopolizing the burble's sting
birds blossomed into x-poetry  
in three dimensional inky hostility
Flying flesh singes on contact
with the unamused canvass of guide lines
and the aviary birthright is brainwashed
into a demotion of teardrop blobs
The ill-fated notion of an Operation Phoenix
strategy only drowns ideas in a lava shower
melting all the desperate hours
in a pot of calculated surreality
until the inspiration falls to evaporation
leaving the once-introspective poet
with sordid scraps of thematic ash

swooning to the end of time in rhyme

riddled in presumptuous analogy

 wringing withers amply fortified

caricatures dance on cue'd medleys 

escaping furnished reality's bind

 insomniacs sense of superiority 

stand in farce's quot'd alignment 

benign metaphorical travesty's fix

 winding down in a dish of foreplay

Hallelujah's moment in sunrise's praise

Author's Note

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Reviews

[s y e]

Holy crap, I had to read this a few times because when you two write together it is deep and my brain needs to like, think and think and think to completely understand it 100%... :-)

// Ambition shivering in cold sweat
crumbles in the subconscious
like a flustered ball of ink-soiled paper
Mockingbird taunts thought gravity //

I felt like I couldn't breathe while reading this... it was so powerful it took my breathe away. Well done guys, loved it.

Wellies & all that jazz! xo

[Frieda P]

Haha always appreciate a holy crap, when you figure it out let me know noodlebumble, thanks muchly for the wellies, it's raining it's pouring here ;-) Jazz'd you enjoyed peanut. xo

[s y e]

It's raining cats and dogs here, I just walked home from school, aha. I look like I just had a shower. ;-P Always a pleasure, Mama! xo

[kublakhan27]

OMG This is funny...everybody has pretty much said the exact same thing: that they had to hold their breath while reading. Not that that's a bad thing by any means, it's great ;P Thanks so much Noodlebop, glad we could entertain you, or perplex you, or both haha

[Michael G. Smith]

It left me completely dazed from head to toe.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much Michael

[Frieda P]

Sounds like we did our job thanks so much Michael.

[David Scott]

I like your collaborations.
This type of writing breaks up the routine of our habits in composing poetry and leads to something entirely different than we could have created by ourselves.
Congrats to the bot of you and this fine write!

[Frieda P]

It certainly expands the horizons of a poet, funny we were trying to emulate each other's styles, luckily we met in the middle somewhere I think...thanks so much Scott.

[Shirlena]

I love the concept or rather my interpretation which is the ink often takes on a life of it's own and many times we think we are in charge. It speaks to the idea sometimes we are not always in total control of our writing sometimes we have to go the direction of the muse and it's the ultimately the boss. This is a beautiful tapestry of range and color you two poets have weaved. Love the music and the video too.

[Frieda P]

Ahh you're a smart cookie Shirlena, thanks so much for this review, muchly appreciated...

[gabrielle]

Hey, Frieda, you got me "googling" for word meanings over and over again. This is one piece that i need to re-read to fully understand its depth. =)

[Frieda P]

Blame kublakhan it's a collaboration, I'm pretty sure all those googly words are his ;-) Thanks muchly....

[Traci]

Wow, this is definitely not the piece that should be read at 4am. I will need to read it many more times to get the full effect, but I will say congrats on another amazing collaboration by two of my favorites. Well done my friends.

[Frieda P]

Haha I reread it at 3 AM, I totally understand, I was confuzzled myself and I wrote part of it ;-) Thanks so much for your kind words Traci.

[N!LoC]

oh wow... this is a long one!

[Frieda P]

Ha, it's a collaboration, we both had a lot to say!

[Ai Lun]

You have a very unique poetic fingerprint! I think I could easily tell if you had written something without seeing your name attached to it. You have a wonderful style, may you never change it :)

[Frieda P]

Muchly appreciated Aaron, but I had a partner in crime here, ha, he's wildly talented, thank my friend kublakhan too. Grazie mille ;-)

[Ai Lun]

I've never thought about creating collaborative poetry. It would be kinda fun to try! If you want to collab with me at any point, send a message :)

[Frieda P]

I've done quite a few with different poets, it's fun and interesting to try to get your styles to mesh, I'd be delighted....will be in touch my friend.

[Praveeta]

I tried to catch my breath while reading. Felt like I was on a roller coaster ride to wonderland :) Beautifully penned and amazing collaboration.

[Frieda P]

Haha that's exactly what it felt like writing it too, so jazz'd you enjoyed Praveeta :-)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

What a wonderful and beautiful poem Frieda! :-)

Kaze~ :-D

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Kazie, you have to thank my buddy kublakhan too, he did an uber amazing job. ;-)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Ok, hehehehe! ;-)