Muster'd Clouds~

rumblings woke the heavens

   flames of an entangled union

forbidden in god's name

   spirits roar'd in orgastic unison

doves flew over bombastic skies,

  seasons brought changing fervor

sun & moon set simultaneously

   seeping secret fights of heart

muster'd clouds settled above betrayal

   reigning under acuity's silent decree

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Jack...]

This one my sweet friend whispers in dark clouded thoughts, words that find the sunset lost somewhere in the horizon's imagination, well below any visions of joy or happiness. Mustr'd Clouds strangle blue skies and make it hard to breathe.

"doves flew over bombastic skies,"

Loved this line, loved them all but this one really stood out for me. Searching for that peace on wings facing every charcoal sky for as far as the eye can or can not see.

Short but once again, amazing

[Frieda P]

I kind of like that line too Jack, thanks so much, you humble me always.

[ANM]

It has and edge and deepness great writing!

[s y e]

Loved the title to this one... how can you leave me this speechless for this long!? Makes no sense... oh no wait, you just blow me away and leave me speechless with your beautiful poetry. Again, you leave me wanting more.... I can't believe how speechless I am though!

Everything about this was perfect... The imagery was so vivid; worded to perfection.

Flip flops & all that jazz! xo

[Lyn Anderson]

Another hit -- and man, this song rocks.

[Frieda P]

I love KT...she rocks, must be something with that 'K' letter ;-)

[Lyn Anderson]

ha ha must be

[Frieda P]

That's what she said. ;-)

[Cryingkate]

Extra thanks for leaving the music to choice for this messed up computer sound card I'm using..
It was extra kind thing to do. Sacrificing your creative works just for me.
Thanks...

[Frieda P]

Ah it's that silly sound card, need to get yourself a new one, so you can dance along with the poetry. ;-)

[Cryingkate]

We need new computers , We gotta be frugal for a couple more months then we can start getting some of our wants and not just needs. :-) coming soon :-)

[Frieda P]

Until then, I'll dance for you, no problemo Connie. ;-)

[Cryingkate]

Heck no... You can rid me that easy.. I'll still come by when I am not commenting back and forth and see your site. I can still do it but have to shut down frequent and disk clean & defrag alot.

Where there is a will there is a way.

[Cryingkate]

I meant can't not can rid me

[Frieda P]

Defrag, is that a dance move? ha ;-)

[Cryingkate]

Can you learn it? Can old dogs learn new tricks? Careful now that I know about the 90 all I can think of is Lucille Ball in the movie Fuller Brush girl... She is a fuller brush salesmen and she stops at a home with kids that ends up getting her tied up and helpless to these little spoiled bratty kids :-)

[Frieda P]

Ha I haven't seen that one, but yes, I'm pretty sure it's quite similar. ;-)

[Cryingkate]

OMg one of my favorite classics. I'll try to find it and send ya the link...

[Frieda P]

I don't think I've ever seen her in anything but I Love Lucy...

[Cryingkate]

http://www.tcm.com/this-month/article/147397|0/The-Fuller-Brush-Girl.html

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=syC_kM-FroU

[Cryingkate]

OK so here is only the best lines that make this muster perfectly divine:

rumblings woke the heavens

flames of an entangled union

forbidden in god's name

spirits roar'd in orgastic unison

doves flew over bombastic skies,

seasons brought changing fervor

sun & moon set simultaneously

seeping secret fights of heart

muster'd clouds settled above betrayal

reigning under acuity's silent decree

Yup lol every word ....I love the synche....
All week I've been thinking about the moon and sun setting together.

I do think us close family writers do pick up things from each other without one word.
We hear each other in the field we cannot see.
It happens constantly.

[Frieda P]

Ha Connie, laughing here, so jaxz'd you did, and happy it didn't blow your speakers or whatever it is that happens, how do you do it without music? Thanks so much!

[Cryingkate]

how do you do it without music? well like the cave men did :-)

[ron]

WOW. Forbidden love. You are going to get in trouble aren't you Frieda. This is a beautiful write Frieda.

[Frieda P]

It's only poetry ron....and it was a long time ago. ha ;-) Thanks muchly...

[ron]

I know, but it was very moving non the less Frieda.

[Frieda P]

You know? Who told you? haha ;-)

[ron]

No one told me. I guess if truth be told I guessed. It is a very moving write Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Just kidding with you redwood, thanks so much..........

[ron]

You are most welcome Dear Lady Frieda.