The Goddess Trapped Inside

The Goddess Trapped Inside

A Poem by Gabrielle E. M. T.
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I wrote this for my ex, but unfortunately he didn't read it until after he broke my heart. Thie poem/stroy has a lot of meaning about us, both Literal and Metaphoric. One of my deepest poems. Enjoy.

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A woman trapped inside a girl so young.

Her age and heart are wisely sung.

 

 

Her body stays the same but in her eyes you can see her age.

The woman inside her soul is trapped in her bodily cage.

 

 

Radiant as the sun is her long, soft hair.
Smooth and snowy white skin, so soft and fair.

 

 

She glows like the beams of a full moon.

Her voice like a slow, soothing, lullaby tune.

 

 

Her eyes are crystal blue and deep.

Tears of diamonds streams down her face when she weeps.

 

 

Her heart will age, but change, not her size.

Her body forever small, but her mind always wise.

 

 

She has a mind that is mature and old.

A heart that is young and as pure as gold.

 

 

She is angelic but not exactly good.

Her life is often dark and hidden under her hood.

 

 

She is dark, but not quite bad.

Her life tends to be mournful and sad.

 

 

She has a halo of stars around her head.

But if you stare in her eyes they may appear red.

 

 

She is a goddess, divine and pure.

Her soft and healing touch, any disease it can cure.

 

 

Her body is so perfect and without flaw.

Her soul is love, and that is her only law.

 

 

Her goal in life is to find her one and only.

She doesn’t want to die old and lonely.

 

 

She has gone through life, through it’s hurts and pains.

She will never stop till love is what she gains.

 

 

Finally one mysterious and magical night,

She had at last found the man that was right.

 

 

He didn’t treat her like a girl but the woman she was.

Because loving and caring for her is all that he does.

 

 

He loved every bit of her, her heart, body , and soul.

Living and loving her forever and always had become his goal.

 

 

He worshipped her body and gave her praise.

He loved her with all that he could for the rest of his days.

 

 

She gave him her whole self and loved him with all she could.

They loved each other from the start and promised they always would.

 

 

He was the half that made her whole.

She had finally thought that she had fulfilled her life’s goal.

 

 

But this wasn’t true, there was more to her curse.

Something would happen that would make things much worse.

 

 

Because for her to stay both human and immortal she must bear.

And this is where the darkness rips this perfect pair.

 

 

She wasn’t quite the woman she thought herself to be.

To be an earthly woman she would have to reproduce, that is key.

 

 

So they tried and failed, and in doing so that was a sin.

The purpose of him entering her would be to have their kin.

 

 

They had no child so she became tainted and impure.

She now had lost her divinity and immortality for sure.

 

 

She then became human and mortal for the rest of her life.

She now had to avoid all of the evil, bullet and knife.

 

 

Inside her stomach grew not a baby but a disease of pain.

On that day there were terrible storms of lightning, hail, and rain.

 

 

She had lost her powers, so she couldn’t help the ill.

For her there was no cure, shot nor pill.

 

 

Her perfect body became weak and frail.

And over her life spread a dark and evil veil.

 

 

She laid there dying on their soft, warm bed.

She knew it wouldn’t be long until her body would be dead.

 

 

He held her and kissed her softly till the end.

Her broken and lonely heart, he had with love, already mend.

 

 

With her last breath she whispered softly “I love you”.

As a tear rolled down his cheek he bent down and whispered back “I love you too”.

 

 

She smiled softly and then closed her eyes.

In her loving man’s arms is where she finally dies.

 

 

The man knew she was immortal, not her body but her soul.

And to be with her again in the after life was now his goal.

 

 

Even though her body died her love for him lived on.

He loved her as much as he did even after she was gone.

 

 

Their love was perfect, destined to transcend.

But as for this poem, this is The End.

© 2008 Gabrielle E. M. T.


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Hurray for my wickedly awesome God-daughter! Oh my goodness. This was completely awesome. No joking. Truly a great read. It read like an epic poem. A fairytale gone horribly wrong. A very wistful and longing tone. Good rhyme and very free flow. I've read some of your stuff before but this is unbelivable. Really great job, sweetie. I'm so proud of you! I'm going to send this to a few friends to check out 'cause I'm cool like that! ;)

Posted 16 Years Ago


9 of 9 people found this review constructive.




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I hate to disagree, my sweet friend, with a few of the other reviews, but I had trouble with some of the rhyme of the flow. The words delivered the message perfectly, and I enjoyed the read. Overall, this is a very good poem, and enjoyable. You have a great talent at getting your point across, and doing it in an entertaining manner.
Good work.



Posted 16 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.

Each stanza is so very good, how you managed to keep the flow and grasp each sence for so long I will never know. I great piece. Mx

Posted 16 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.

This is completely epic. Really, this is wonderful. It took a turn when I didn't think it was going to, and that is what I love about it; it's almost shocking.

Posted 16 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.

Gabirelle..
This piece showed your skill of rhyme. I agree with Helen,,"demonic" may be too strong, but it was a beautifully written tragedy. I would be dishonest if I said I like long love poems, but this one kept me through every line. You are very talented, and imaginative. I'm glad you sent this to me.

Posted 16 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.

This is a tragic romance, one that brought tears to my eyes. Not many things do that, I am highly impressed my dear! Excellent description, and vivid images. I was there with her, until the end. I weep for his loss, and her guilt.
Thank you for sharing
xo

Posted 16 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.

This is beautiful...truly it is. The two line stanzas are unusual and effective, but some of your sentences are a little too long. It must have been a nightmare trying to rhyme this epic, but you did it!Put an 's' on weep...I think demonic is a bit strong...You have the word 'finally' twice in two consecutive lines...I believe there are many pieces you could write from this one piece...Wonderful effort!!!! Love the story line.

Posted 16 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.

this is quite the odyssey really...you may have a few poems within this one piece. It was very good though.

Posted 16 Years Ago


6 of 7 people found this review constructive.

An epic tale. :) Congratulations on this. It is classic in the length and your use of language. It would be an interesting excercise to see if you can encapsulate this into three stanzas now to see where the depth in the prose is. I often do that whether Im writing a story or a poem. But Kudos to you. I have not read any poetry on here which was so clearly wanting to be definitive in the story-telling and I enjoyed it thoroughly.

Posted 16 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.

Thank you Crystal for sending me this. Obviously you were already a fan of the writer ~smile~. That is really sweet and this is truly an amazing poem. Had me teary-eyed throughout. The rhyming is spot-on. Definately worthy of sharing around.
Excellent job!
- M

Posted 16 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.

Crystal, this is a loving poem filled with a sadness.. though thier love endured and endures.. it is sad and lonely.. so heartfelt..Unable to bear a child seems to be the beginning of her sickness.. I can understand some of the issues embedded into this lovely poem.
I love the flow of it and it reminds me of a ballad somewhat..
I enjoyed it..

Chloe
xoxo

Posted 16 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.


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