M.I.A.

M.I.A.

A Poem by gram linski

An empty room

on an empty night

an empty dog

with an empty bite

an empty list

of nothing to do

and an empty feeling

to do with you

                   woof, woof,

© 2019 gram linski


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Day-um! Nicely done....*Nods head regally and strides purposefully away*

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


gram linski

3 Weeks Ago

Th first comment was a joke, I think, you do have an interesting thought process,
Carol Cashes

3 Weeks Ago

CRAAAP! I didn't mean to suggest the thesaurus thing is what YOU did - it's the ONLY way I could ha.. read more
gram linski

2 Weeks Ago

No worries, brought a smile,
I am often skeptical of relying so heavily on one word, such as "empty" . . . but this poem really does it right! The simplicity & the rhythm & rhyme make this feel like lyrics & I especially like this: "empty feeling to do with you" . . . it conjures up so much regret & misery (whether it's a human or a substance, it could be whatever haunts us!) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


gram linski

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks, yeah it's the cheats way out, lol, I never really thought about the substance part, but it .. read more
This is one of those moments in time when you've got to many choices.
Then you just sit and do feck all.

Posted 1 Month Ago


gram linski

1 Month Ago

That's the one Paul, a bit of self pity and a fucked tv, great for the pen, not so much the soul,
I love it! Simple and sweet.

Posted 1 Month Ago


gram linski

1 Month Ago

Well I wouldn't call it sweet, but I appreciate the comment, lol, thanks Lea,
Lea Sheryn

1 Month Ago

You're welcome, Gram. I liked it.
Indeed the opening two lines set a scene of such a state of vacuum, an airless place of imprisonment. The empty dog, lifeless on the floor simply adds to the monotony of the scene and the whole piece leaves that empty, powerless feeling imprinted.

Posted 1 Month Ago


gram linski

1 Month Ago

Cheers, John, the empty dog was far from lifeless, he was the one writing it down, lol
The repetition works well. That feeling of emptiness realy came through. Short piece, strong impact. Well done gram.

Chris

Posted 1 Month Ago


gram linski

1 Month Ago

Hey, Chris, glad you liked it nothing wrong with a bit of melancholy wave, lol
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Month Ago

Look at my typos!! I do know how to spell, really I do :)
Romantic love does this to people. If that special person is in some way inaccessible, all is emptiness. It's like an addiction.

Posted 1 Month Ago


gram linski

1 Month Ago

Thanks, John, trying to fill an unfillable hole, missing love and musing
very effective write in its form...
the short, sharp lines...the repetition of "empty" even the "empty dog"
wish i had thought of that one...
and the ending...who's barking the dog or the speaker..or are they one in the same...


excellent piece, gram...
j.

Posted 1 Month Ago


gram linski

1 Month Ago

Thanks j, they were indeed one and the same, I was the empty dog,

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