Unpoems

a travelogue poem

A Winter wild mountain wind

corridors the enclosed

canal     makes my bones

ache

        for spanish sol,

closer

and

sooner

and further

than I feel,

" chennis une poco de niro, por favor, "

night fishing the trains

with a knife of

pure light

almost eating trees for the 

return

of the sea

black eyed limping moon

follows

shadows

bleeds            ice for me,

Radio ! savage radio - 

weeping songs

for me to gently die

Exit

swinging - the rain  felt frozen

in my toes - 

the grass and the leaves

      inhaled in sleep

the pen

and

the hand

and

the end

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"the pen/and/the hand/and/the end"
"bleeds ice for me/weeping songs/for me to gently die"
Melanie Safka sang.."I am not a poet, living is the poem"
so at death we unpoem? and the radio announces our exit...and the grass and leaves inhaled sleep, as the poet found eternal sleep.
"night fishing the trains" such a good line...
as poets we are on an endless track of writing...sometimes the muse just comes when it feels like it, and maybe not at an opportune moment...but bought the ticket...so we have to ride when it runs.
one of your best...my brain might be limping in a wrong direction...but i found me in here.

and your poem inspired one from me which will eventually post...thanks for the inspiration, gram.

[gram linski]

wow, thanks, j. glad you identified with this one and it inspired a great writer like you your wit and clever use of language has been an inspiration for some time, thanks for the great review, appreciate very much

[barleygirl]

Just to prove I'm not bullshittin' ya when I give you a good review, I decided to comment on this one instead of clicking onward . . . in short, I can't glean a single flea off this dog! *wink!* wink!* But I could feel the enthusiasm loud & clear! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[gram linski]

thanks for reading , Margie,

[AJNJ]

Slipping away gently, pen in hand, near grass, under a duvet of fallen leaves...it would be a great transition to whatever lies next. The best I can think of and I think of it often. I just loved the places your words took me and the myriad of stunning images my mind spun around them.

[gram linski]

thanks for the great review, Pestonjee, a few of you guys have picked up on the death part which never really occurred to me but must have been lurking in my thoughts somewhere, it would indeed be a fine transition , like that idea,

[AJNJ]

Indeed, some words felt so final yet beautiful. You're welcome sir. My pleasure always....

[R.E. Ray]

For the poet, the heart beats through the hand and the pen. When the hand stops moving, so do we and life. I see this despair, a creeping toward death, when writers can't find their voice or the words that once came easily. I think this is why so many poets write about death. It's the one thing they don't and will never truly understand, until their own demise, and then of course they can tell nobody. I must admit, gram, I often struggle to interpret your poems, and that might be evident here, too. But, that's the strong sense I take from this one.

[gram linski]

thanks, R.E. I struggle to interpret my poems some time, lol, don't think it was quite as sombre as you make out but all us poets and artists are all basically writing about death in some form liked what you saw in this one , thanks for the read appreciate

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This made my own bones ache for Spanish sol. I once drove a truck along the Mexican/American border through desert towns and dusty heat and this brought the wanderlust of the road fresh from my memories.
Thoroughly enjoyed. F.

[gram linski]

thanks Fabian, glad you picked up on the wander lust part this was written when I was travelling about being transient , glad you enjoyed

[Robert Trakofler]

this one gave me a tear Mr, Gram nothing worse than a wet bunny you know! we dont smell good when damp not as bad as a dog but pretty bad:/ Jacobs remarks after reading your poem just soaked my fur! this is simply beautiful expression good sir

[gram linski]

hey, Bunny thanks for the great review, always enjoy your comments and bunny eyed view of things, lol,