Wish...

from the deepest corner of my heart..

wish death could solve all problems ..

wish everything finished in one  go ... 

life seems so tiring sometimes .. 

wonder how death would taste like .. 

they say it's just a touch and a go .. 

but would it hurt to leave the worries behind .. 

after all, we do love worries .. 

we cannot live without them ... 

a happy life is a myth ... 

a happy death .. unknown ...

Reviews

[Blue Ivory]

Death is considered beautiful by poets and artists. To us, the idea of mystery fuses itself with beauty. Often we have all wondered about death. Some of us fantasize about it. A few of those dare to write it down. But only very few have tried putting their words to actions, and the ones who have, have joined the world of the unknown. I have this theory, that true beauty was meant to be a secret. Only a chosen few can experience it. Once they do, they don't have words to express themselves-and in the case of death, there is no choice! So I really like your thoughts on this. I love this sort of poetry :)

[Hamza]

i feel death has been portrayed wrongly as the last salvation from the worries of our life, i thought putting it in a contrast ..
though i gave a lot of priorities to the pain and loss, death somehow turns out to be inevitably the last resort ... people just can't get over with it ..
thank you so much .. :)

[Blue Ivory]

That's actually a pretty interesting thought!

[Dark Butterfly]

it makes you think, good job:)

[Hamza]

thanks a lot .. !!
:)

[yusuf]

very ingenious! Subject like these could only be consumed in words when we let ourselves wander in the deepest of abysses.A good job!

[Hamza]

oh well, abyss usually has dual character and this one is probably about the depths infinite.. thank you for the review .. :)

[yusuf]

infinite ? ummm You are welcome.

[Kelsey]

This isn't something I'm used to seeing from you, and I think that's one reason I really enjoyed it. I hope you can rid these thoughts from that head of yours and see the good in life once again. Beautiful job. x

[Hamza]

thank you .. but i'd like to tell you it was written in a positive perspective, in a way to say, worries are much more precious than something that we're unfamiliar with ..
life is a beautiful journey and worries, the toppings.. :)

[Tarry Franck]

Thought provoking - really liked it.

[Hamza]

thank you .. :)

[quinfinn]

this is very, very good. i have seen you write other things which couldn't touch this level of finesse.......one small critique here.....line four "wonder how death would taste like" how and like are the same and create a double definitive. remove one or the other and this problem is gone and the write stays awesome. Hamza, i love...LOVE this write! the last two lines are profoundly deep and truthful.

[Hamza]

oh yes i was considering that when i wrote it but i had a confusion over how and what .. i'll correct that right away ..
and thank you for your kind reviews .. :)

[kublakhan27]

Perfect, especially the last couplet...the last four lines could be a poem in itself.

[Hamza]

thank you so much :)

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[Gray Witch]

Well done but scary views in one so young....

[Hamza]

i wrote it in a positive perspective ... we all fear death but it's a fact that we all have to face it some day or the other ..
thank you .. :)

[Phillitup]

Interesting...

I felt a very strong emotion lurking in this piece.

[Hamza]

thank you very much.. :)