Crucify the Siren: Aria of the Horizon

The flicker of your dawning eyes,

Shall break the spell of your disguise.

With rotten petals of your fear

And dancing stars will disappear.

My mirror mirror on the wall,

Foretold the ending of their fall.

Like brewing storms of weeping night

That canceled the dandelions' flight.

A shadow to be forgotten,

With the painted waves to listen.

Beside the horizon's nymph lie,

The lost Orion of the sky

Reviews

[CHRIS ANDES]

a wonderland of imagination =]

[Queen Empress]

I love the last part "The lost Orion of the Sky"..Well penned! Amazingly done :)) Keep it up!

[The Scholar]

The flow in this piece is amazing! It keeps the reader going, almost in a trance, especially with the use of words such as "spell" and "mirror mirror on the wall."

The only time it seems to break flow is the line "Like brewing storms of the night." I feel like there should be an adjective describing night, or a two-syllable adjective rep[lacing the "the" before night. You probably know what you're doing though, and I only noticed it the third time I read through it anyway (which I did because I enjoyed it so much :]).

Permission to shelve?

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Really nice picture here with your words. Love this part:
"With rotten petals of your fear
And dancing stars will disappear."

[dan nacario]

thanks for all the reviews..

[MandaBear]

Awesome writing :) This is my favorite constellation. great job

[Kuhr Gred]

wow.. I like it.. I think your hobby is to see the constellation in the sky every night.. it's wonderful.. :) GREAT WRITE!! keep it up ;)
-Kuhr Gred