Crucify the Siren: Aria of the Horizon

Crucify the Siren: Aria of the Horizon

A Poem by dan nacario

The flicker of your dawning eyes,
Shall break the spell of your disguise.
With rotten petals of your fear
And dancing stars will disappear.

My mirror mirror on the wall,
Foretold the ending of their fall.
Like brewing storms of weeping night
That canceled the dandelions' flight.

A shadow to be forgotten,
With the painted waves to listen.
Beside the horizon's nymph lie,
The lost Orion of the sky

© 2012 dan nacario


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a wonderland of imagination =]

Posted 11 Years Ago


I love the last part "The lost Orion of the Sky"..Well penned! Amazingly done :)) Keep it up!

Posted 12 Years Ago


The flow in this piece is amazing! It keeps the reader going, almost in a trance, especially with the use of words such as "spell" and "mirror mirror on the wall."

The only time it seems to break flow is the line "Like brewing storms of the night." I feel like there should be an adjective describing night, or a two-syllable adjective rep[lacing the "the" before night. You probably know what you're doing though, and I only noticed it the third time I read through it anyway (which I did because I enjoyed it so much :]).

Permission to shelve?

Posted 12 Years Ago


Really nice picture here with your words. Love this part:
"With rotten petals of your fear
And dancing stars will disappear."

Posted 12 Years Ago


thanks for all the reviews..

Posted 12 Years Ago


Awesome writing :) This is my favorite constellation. great job

Posted 12 Years Ago


wow.. I like it.. I think your hobby is to see the constellation in the sky every night.. it's wonderful.. :) GREAT WRITE!! keep it up ;)
-Kuhr Gred

Posted 12 Years Ago



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dan nacario
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iriga city, cam. sur, Philippines



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