Cold

I know you're hurt.

The world feels like it's slipping away,

Just to leave you in the dirt.

 

The rains crashing down,

Harder than ever before.

It's like you're living in an empty town,

and you're left lying cold on the floor.

 

Storm raging on around you,

While you're on the ground.

You're praying to God you'll get through,

but it's hard not to feel doubt.

 

It's cold and dark.

And just when you think you see a spark,

Wind crashes through, lighting strikes

Leaving you cold, on the floor, and back in the dark.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

Wonderful poem... It was very clever to see the story/poem transform between the mental capacity to understand the depth of mood and the loneliness that accompanies it, and also the reoccurring theme of being cold and left to their own suffering throughout the poem. : ) I like how you've centered the poem in the middle of the page, too. I had thoughts in my head to write a comment, but my dog keeps trying to escape the house out the door!! lol Very cool poem... xox -Mark

[Loveless]

very good job!:)

[Mir]

Thank you!

[Miranda Richard]

Cool, quite dark but that's what makes it interesting. Good job! :)

[Mir]

Thank you!!!

[Brittany]

This evokes feelings of darkness and despair, so kudos for the emotion.

[Mir]

Thank you!!!