13 word story

I saw a contest somewhere... a life story in 13 words.

Adventuring.

F

E

L

L

.

HARD.

B r o k e n.

Climbed.[ Painfully.]

Stood.

Remembered… walking.

Stumbled.

Finally, Learned:  Flying.

 

 

Author's Note

just a little something light and fun

Reviews

[Samith Pich]

Hey! This is a small 13 worded gem of a poem/ story. I think we can all related to each and every word on this page and I really like how you've experimented with the fonts (even though I'm sure it was quite a restricted list) the visual dimension they add to the poem really helped me feel the words.

Personally I would have not included all the fullstops you've included in the poem BUT the punctuation forced me to stop and really consider each word so I can see why you've included them.

Thanks for sharing

Samith

[Frieda P]

That's great, visually stimulating and clever. Nice.

[Marie Anzalone]

Thanks Frieda, glad you stopped by, and also glad you enjoyed this. I had fun with this one. As I mentioned to Archia below, perhaps this is more cliched than my usual work, but it was interesting to work with fonts and forms. I was inspired by a masterful and stunning work by one of the best female writers on this site, LJW, and a piece she wrote about the measure of a man.

[Frieda P]

Welcome, I don't know who that is, but I'll be sure to check it on, again kudos, pen on.

[Marie Anzalone]

here is the poem; all of her work is fantastic. she is brutal and honest and I am in awe of her ability. wish more poeple would read her:

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/LJW/484135/

[Archia]

I think this is great. I love the use of different fonts and structure, it really adds something more and it makes it just that bit more special. It really does tell a story greatly.

[Marie Anzalone]

Thanks for your comments, Archia. I do not do short verse often... I just feel it is hard to capture the essence of life's complexit yif the form is too simplistic. I feared this one was cliche, but I still had fun with it. Glad you liked it.

[Mary]

living in 13 steps! To quote the great Bill and Ted, "most excellent!"

[Marie Anzalone]

Thanks, Mary. I was going for soemthign everyone could realte to :-)

[IAmGhost120]

I stumbled upon your poem while I was previewing the submissions for my contest, "Sometimes, Appearance Counts Too."
This is so creative!! I'd have never thought you could tell such a coherent story in just 13 words - with such interesting formatting, to boot!! You should definitely enter this in more contests - this work has the potential to win and is very quirky and unique. Great!!

[Judy Ponceby]

I really like this! And, very well done! :) The progression with the haltingness (is that a word?) lol adds beautifully :)

[stars are far]

nice :)

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

This is really neat-o!

[The Cougar's Den]

Aw, I love the picture you painted so perfectly! Great job!

[An owl on the moon]

With the words pictures.. glimpses of actions and feelings.. you create a brilliant mix of thoughts that move us from falling to flying.. and I do love to fly. So well done!