Take A Second Look

Take A Second Look

A Poem by Chris

I'm diving...
Deeper into the darkness...
Further from the light.
I'm trying...
Avoiding being heartless...
Doing something right.
I'm dying...
Slowly becoming harmless...
Refusing to fight.
I'm lying...
Becoming one of the breathless...
Losing all my might.
I dived into darkness away from the streetlights.
I tried to do something right pushing him away from headlights.
I died and took his place in the street.
I lied there watching the driver retreat.
I saved his life by giving my own.
I will die with my deed unknown.

© 2011 Chris


Author's Note

Chris
Another quick write, experimenting with new ideas.
Reviews encouraged!

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this is good...I would like the last stanza to be a bit more spaced down after ' losing all my might'...I loved your format here...lovely visual impact.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow this is a really 'anonymous heroic' piece. Its also has that self sacrificial sense to it. Nice work~

Posted 13 Years Ago



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