My Fuzzy Little Friend

My Fuzzy Little Friend

A Poem by haymaker14
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Yep my Sugar Glider :)

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Apple fetish,
fuzzy skin.
What a wonderful world
I am living in!
Your big black eyes,
your tiny pink nose.
That stripe down your back,
contains more then I know!
Soft and sweet,
those tiny feet.
Rest all day,
and stay wide awake all night.
You climb and play,
I love you all day!
I miss you when you are gone,
but you are never too far away!

© 2013 haymaker14


Author's Note

haymaker14
ERHMER GERD! I love my new Sugar Glider. It is SOOOOOO cute! It lets us hold it now it's a bit more comfy with us! It loves to play!!! I love giving it apples! Love you Rocky hehe

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very adorable content
sugar gliders are so darn cute
didn't know they ate apples so you taught me something*)
thank you for the cute furry critter smile

Posted 7 Years Ago


haymaker14

7 Years Ago

Haha thanks and NP! Apples are actually one of their favorite food (because of the sweetness I recko.. read more
Overall, it is a good limerick, but I have one small suggestion. Try to follow a more... how do you say.... strict syllable pattern, for lack of a better word. For example, when you say the last line, it doesn't rhyme as well because you have two more syllables in that line than the line above it. Another suggestion about word choice. A fetish is usually described as something scandalous, or at least in my world it is. :P I don't exactly think loving apples is so scandalous! But, anyhoo, it is a cute poem about an even cuter little fuzzball! Keep up the great work, you are getting better and better at writing! Hope you don't mind the criticism that much!

Posted 7 Years Ago


haymaker14

7 Years Ago

Lol thanks. Especially for the criticism! Fetish is something you are kind of addicted to. Like Whis.. read more
Chloe

7 Years Ago

No, a fetish is normally described as "A course of action to which one has an excessive and irration.. read more
haymaker14

7 Years Ago

I searched it. It could be a desire- sexual or not. So, we were both right. Because in one way it is.. read more

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I am a female who ADORES reading and writing! I love writing poems! I love limericks but I don't write them much. I hope you enjoy my writing and my perspective on the world. I LOVE reviews, if it's b.. more..

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