A lover's nostalgia

With every touch its different, scintillating gleams

impeccable description and encouraging words, 

sardonic whispers surround our bodies, 

but we just whisper haphazardly back.

With each kiss you give me, the invigorating feeling,

invades the evil fiend inside of me, 

and turns it to halcyon cadaver in the dead of the night.

Your kiss sends me deeper into the feeling of besot, 

the phantasmal atmosphere turns into perilous pleasure of happiness,

and the scent of true love will be reminiscent of you.

Cavernous eyes engulfs the beauty of this hour, 

the taciturn sounds of our love consumes the zephyr weather,

my heart is entombed under your beauty and elegance.

The cacophony whispers of our souls as they mend as one,

makes me fall deeper and deeper into the cave of love.

Reviews

[Calypso]

It seems like love can be like this.

[Muse]

These are not the words of a 16 year old. You are talented and mature beyond your years my dear. This is wonderful writing! You remind me of another writer on here named Kelsie Stark. She too is talented and wise beyond her years. Keep writing honey, and you'll be in a league of your own!

[nostal]

Hmmm I just wish you would lighten up a bit with the adjectives. Adjectives do add depth to writing, but I feel like you murdered some of the lines when they could have been written easily. Remember: Quality over quantity.

[ericdeben]

Great word choices! You may want to consider adding a description to catch someones attention to click on your poem and read it; a selling point. But other than that, I can't find anything to criticize.

[Ariana H]

Even though many other people have told you this in reviews already, I don't care. Great word choices! I don't really have anything bad to say.

[Joe Shetina]

I'm stunned by your gift for word choice. I'd like to pick this poem apart, but I find it very well-written, descriptive, and imaginative. If that means I've failed as a reviewer, I guess that's too bad. Love it.

[Vinod Kumar U K]

The ultimate destination of love, nice work.........

[sugar]

beautiful write

[light and ashes]

I love this!! I really think it is so fantastic! It is so beautiful and romantic. The imagery is depicted nicely. It has a classic feel. This is such a lovely write.