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He watches

through a pane

of dirty glass

like you and I

he's had a future

he's had a past

time for him

is almost spent

calloused hands 

like old cement

delicate fallibility 

impales his skin

ghost like stupor

invested in silence

quiet and guarded

bearded with thoughts

secrets antiqued within

waiting patiently now

for his hour to come

visual modality blurred

hearing obscured

deliberate and unmeasured

this process of decay

frail like lead paint

 

                    slowly peeling,

 

                                    chipping away................

 

 

Reviews

[EMF]

An incredible piece. Compelling. You have created a perfect character study in just a few lines. The depth of insight, coupled with a love of your subject matter generate a power and intensity, while you also imbed a tendrness and understanding that is incomparible. Class work Lady. Nice to get the time to read and reread. You have left me images that will be a long time peeling.

[MOON]

Visual writing, poignant . Like the line frail like lead paint .

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Deep and insightful. I have a 91 year Uncle. I had not thought of him in the way that is written here. I think I'll try to give a call this weekend...HELLO? HE... HEL... HELLO?
Great poetry. Made me think of my beloved Elders. Thank You!

[ghost writer]

you write with such elegant flair..you give dignity to this subject..beautifully controlled writing.

[Emrick]

Nice poem.but this is making me feel scared of growing up.

[rachylou]

really gd

[Monica]

You tell a compelling story of life...the photo is captivating. I keep reading and rereading...I absolutely love your poem!

[SuicidePact.]

no words can express how this made me feel as i read it.

[Eagle Cruagh]

The trajedy of age is in not realizing
one is old.
Do not feel sorry for that old man,
he looks through the dirty window pane
and he sees a beautiful young woman.
----- John

[Kelly Scheppers]

Such a compelling write...this ole' man delivers quite a stare into my soul!

Commanding of much applause...and 75 reviews!! My, my!