The Untitled Poem

The Untitled Poem

What does the poet do when words do not render
         Or when one can't hear them sing
What does the poet do when the words do not ring
        Or when one feels the images are not enough

What does the writer do when letters look jumbled
        Or when one can't hear them sing
What does the writer do when letters do not ring 
        Or when one feels the images are not enough

What does the dreamer do when the dreams fragment
        Or when one can't hear them sing
What does the dreamer do when the dreams do not ring
        Or when one feels the images are not enough

What does the lover do when embraces elude the grasp
        Or when one can't hear them sing
What does the lover do when the loves do not ring
        Or when one feels the images are not enough

Author's Note

Do not review the grammar. This piece is a stream of conscious and I want to keep it that way.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I do believe one day. The writer cannot write no-more. The poet cannot write poetry. Many writers did the Hemingway death. A shot gun and no goodbye.
"What does the lover do when embraces elude the grasp
Or when one can't hear them sing
What does the lover do when the loves do not ring
Or when one feels the images are not enough"
The above lines. A question we must ask our self one day. Thank you dear poet for sharing the powerful words. Made me think.
Coyote

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing this writing. It was just something that I was feeling and I tried to bring a little structure to my chaotic thoughts. I am so glad it made you think, that is I think any writer's goal.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree my friend and you are welcome.

[Nessly]

You've described writer's block perfectly!

-V

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you, I am glad liked it.

[Kirsty Woodward]

I feel like I needed to stumble upon this today. The first two stanzas are my favourites.
It's a feeling I feel often, that sort of grasping for words and a rhythm but catching nothing even when I've got so much to say.

A good read and I don't think grammar should be critiqued in poetry anyway. There's no rules in poetry.

[H.L. Cerveise]

I am so glad you like it and it "rang" with you today. I know I get inspiration from other poets both here and from the past so if I can return just a little of that back to another poet who makes me happy.

[Diamond]

HL, you proved that you can play with words even when you don't have some to write. I can so sense your urge to write in this poem. You need to correct the first line from "to" to "do".

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you so much for seeing that typo. Yes, it was an urge I could not resist.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

The use of repetition is pretty interesting and suits your style as well. When I sit down to write, some times I am not able to find a good theme to write on and even if I find the theme then I do not get the exact words for putting on paper. The state of mind of a writer who is not getting what to write has been described in a very well manner. This poem also applies to all other people, be it engineers, doctors, lawyers, etc. When one is unable to start his work and is unable to get ideas out of his mind then the situation you have described so well occurs. Keep writing.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. You are correct I meant this poem for more than just creative writers. I feel others can also be warrior poets in fields that have nothing to do with creative writing.

[William Liston]

I loved this piece; it flowed so well it was like it basically read itself. I agree with Darian about the repetition of this piece--it was so "tangible" that it was kinda like you altered reality with this poem. I usually don't relate "hearing something sing" or "images not being enough" to some of the topics in this poem, but you described it as if it were normal--as if that were the perfect way to describe it. Great job on this.

-William Liston

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I love what you said, "like it basically read itself," because that was what I was trying to do. In general, I do not like writing phrases that repeat to many times or sing a song that does the same. However, there are a few things that come to me in this manner, and again I have no piece until I write it down.

[Darian B.]

I guess they keep trying... There is something inherently depressing about this poem. The repetition of hopelessness in this piece, left without answers, is really powerful. The title of the poem is a nice touch though, I think it adds to the hopelessness of the work. Nice work, I'm just going to go to my corner and cry now (just kidding, but that's the feeling it invokes) :D

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing this poem. I was having a strange kind of writer's block at the time so yes. I felt like sitting in a dark corner. It was this piece that changed the block and started a new writing flow.

[Darian B.]

Well than, I thank this piece! It did much good