An abuse of power

Just a little babbling i jotted down last night

An abuse of power

Those in power last lost their humanity, and lost it fast..

Fairness and equality replaced with hunger and greed;

Desperate times came at speed.

Who was this man that saw himself fit to lead?!

Bringing stress and desperation for those most in need.

Depriving them of food, depriving them of homes,

Sitting in the front row as his friends picked from their bones.

Lies falling easily from his slippery tongue as he looks in your eye; 

Not really caring if you live or you die.

The wealthy fall over laughing; the poor, with a shake of their head, sigh.

There shall be no redemption for this creature when he dies,

While from the poor peoples mouths, the last thing you will hear is sighs.

Author's Note

Just a quick jotted one then changed again on typing lol, so akk critisms welcome and understood!!😀

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

Don't know the man personally but I guess he was a threat to the poor... You placed your thoughts and frustration on him very well here, simple yet perfect to get the message across... I guess I know the man lol... Welcome back, welcome back...

Now about the first line, I think you could make some change to let flow better... Then the first line of the second stanza, I think 'just' sounds extra a bit... Then in the third stanza second line, you can leave the second you out... What you think?

Sincerely
Dhiman

[hcarson]

I cant remember what i had chaned it too..memory atrocious lol so i had to type in whatever came to mind lol so you are no doubt right about changing those words so i will go back through messages to find what i had there orignally if u get me...head like a blinking sieve! As always dhimen your advice and reviews are invaluable 😁

[hcarson]

Okay i made some more changes...how about now lol..getting there? 😁

[Inject Positivity]

It looks pretty awesome now... Don't worry, you can still work on it when you get more ideas... But I think you did brilliantly being away from writing for so long and write it with such confidence...

[hcarson]

Thank you dhimen 😁

[mou]

it is quite a person specific and may be that is the reason which makes your words so stongest and inert..when we write down something keeping a thought of specific someone,writing gets more powerful..I am telling this because sometime I too feel the same..
profound wording!!

[hcarson]

Thank you mou, your comment is really appreciated 😊

[mou]

most welcome :)

[Shannon]

This is so clear and yet nonspecific enough for everyone to relate.
This line in particular is a powerful image :
Sitting in the front row as his friends picked from their bones.

There are some awkward moments, where flow is interupted. If it's okay, I will play with it over a few days and make a few suggestions?

Welcome back. Great piece!

[hcarson]

Thank u and yes have a fiddle iam happy to change if it irons out the creases..i see the awkward flow at times but words fail me right now..need to read a theosaurus maybe lol,, your comment is lovely and totally appreciated 😊

[Sapientiam]

This was very insightful and frankly intriguing. People who possess power tend to corrupt it, tainting everyone in sight and allowing evil to lead them. The emotions of despair and pain was truly grasped in this poem. Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece!

[hcarson]

Thank you so much, your comment is very mmuch appreciated and i agree totallymwith what u say about power! 😁