Moonlit

Who cares if I can't tell whether it's you or the view
that makes me want to say out loud 
just how beautiful this is to me?

Whether not by either of our choices
both our lives through every trip, turn,
and half hearted heartache burned
have both amounted to you, this view,
and I, losing grip of words
try to pry a peek at something which
I never thought I'd see a glimpse of.

Please, 
let me burn this last candle
if it means I get to see one more single
flicker
of your quicker smile.

Reviews

[Nene]

Wow... Just wow!
I loved the way you set the mourning scene at the end!
If I'm not wrong, then the other person is dead right?
To me it looks like as if the speaker is the the church or in front of the grace of his/her beloved...
love the choice of words! And the imagery contained in it is soothing and relaxing. I could alsmost feel my nerves calming down and the revelation at the end was a soft blow!

[ForgottenByTheWorld]

This had a spectacular rhythm and it left me with a warm feeling on the inside. I enjoyed it wholeheartedly! Thank you!

[iamshadowine]

A very sweet and nice poem :) loved the usage of words ^_^
keep writing :D