Perhaps

suddenly, I realized--

that if my mind freed my heart I could have lived ;

in the armor of your love .

Author's Note

" A novelist can tell story in 20 000 words; poet can show it in 20 words. "

Challenged by that statement, I tried how far I can go by 20 words -- and, here it is.

Reviews

[Tree]

I believe you have achieved what you sought out to do, which is to break down an idea to its most vital and pure core. It is not unlike what the physicist attempts to do with the atom... He knows there is something smaller lurking within, smaller than the electron and the quark. He seeks it out as a matter of truth. The poet here is doing the same. Also want to point out the tone of your piece, and how you used the –––dash, then consequently used the semi-colon; and slow the reader down, ––––making your point. This is the second well written snippet of a poem, I've read today. Well done, Belle.

[Distant horizons]

You have taken a complex emotion and perplexing thought and simplified it in so few words. Excellent.

[khalid]

very simple very short but can be explained in books.....i really liked this qute

[Wolf]

Short and on subject, but it's awesome what can someone create! :)
Great job, keep up the good work Belle!

[Michael G.]

An epiphany!
Great thought. Not a bad mindset to live by, either.
Well done, Belle.

[Marie]

Very nice; makes a good point. Hearts should be free.

[John Fitzgerald]

yes, i like this very much!

we take home the forest but we choke it with the smoke of fear,
in your mind a creature lives out at war, when you are sleeping :)

[Sleeping Maiden]

Beautiful. Short but very powerful indeed. =)
I love it.

[Wondering Mind]

Oh yes! Short, deep and lovely.

[Revery]

Love does not reign free when fears and logic bridle it. Few but strong words, Belle, excellent.