Strange
A Poem by
iamshadowine
Loud wind,
Ice cold,
Three
layers of coats on,
Fog smoking
out of mouth.
As I walk
down the gray stone road,
I find I creepy
house.
Trees dancing,
Water dripping,
Wooden logs
broken,
Spiders crawling
I knock the
door,
I ring the
bell,
“Hello? Is somebody
in there?”
Door opens,
Sound creeps,
Window panes
bang,
Darkness increase
I look for
light switches,
But I can
hear only my footsteps,
As I take
another step,
I step on a
soft thing kept by.
“Meow” the
cat sounds,
I scream,
I run out
of the house,
And I see
the name plate beneath,
‘Mr. Kitty,
since 1926 till
Eternity’
© 2016 iamshadowine
Reviews
This poem made me give a small laugh. Simple yet very enjoyable.
Posted 7 Years Ago
Well, that was an enjoyable read. I will admit that I'm not the biggest fan of the way you ended it, but hey, it still works, and it did a bit of a chuckle out of me (in a good way). I don't know why, but it just felt rushed to me, but more than likely I'm wrong. Anyway, good job. Keep on writing, my fellow writer! :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
Well, that was an enjoyable read. I will admit that I'm not the biggest fan of the way you ended it, but hey, it still works, and it did a bit of a chuckle out of me (in a good way). I don't know why, but it just felt rushed to me, but more than likely I'm wrong. Anyway, good job. Keep on writing, my fellow writer! :)
7 Years Ago
Thank you for reading and leaving your honest reviews :)
7 Years Ago
No problem. :)
It was a sort of fun read, well penned.
Posted 7 Years Ago
It was a sort of fun read, well penned.
7 Years Ago
my pleasure :)
Love it!!!
You did an awesome job on this!!
Keep it up!!
Posted 7 Years Ago
Love it!!!
You did an awesome job on this!!
Keep it up!!
Interesting twist on a classic horror theme.
Posted 7 Years Ago
Interesting twist on a classic horror theme.
This piece appears to have captured many imaginations. The form, and clipped words, work in its favour to build suspense.
I would think I find I creepy house is a typo? (a creepy house), as well as I knock (on) the door?
and a soft thing kept by doesn't translate well -- perhaps a soft thing near by?
Posted 7 Years Ago
This piece appears to have captured many imaginations. The form, and clipped words, work in its favour to build suspense.
I would think I find I creepy house is a typo? (a creepy house), as well as I knock (on) the door?
and a soft thing kept by doesn't translate well -- perhaps a soft thing near by?
Ohhh....this is very suspense from the beginning to the end..
I enjoyed it very much..
Nice one....
Posted 7 Years Ago
Ohhh....this is very suspense from the beginning to the end..
I enjoyed it very much..
Nice one....
Quite fascinating. I sure do enjoy the spookyness of it. Great read!:)
Posted 7 Years Ago
Quite fascinating. I sure do enjoy the spookyness of it. Great read!:)
7 Years Ago
thank you! :D
What a uniquely mystifying piece...grabbed my attention from beginning to end, original and very cool :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
What a uniquely mystifying piece...grabbed my attention from beginning to end, original and very cool :)
Nice poem. I particularly enjoyed the ending and how it added to the creepiness of the entire narrative. For a moment, it felt like the suspense was being followed by a drum roll. Nice one Shadowine.
Posted 7 Years Ago
Nice poem. I particularly enjoyed the ending and how it added to the creepiness of the entire narrative. For a moment, it felt like the suspense was being followed by a drum roll. Nice one Shadowine.
7 Years Ago
Thank you! :D
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