Bended Backs of Broken Men

Far they stand on edges raw
their palms in supplication
Humbled mortals naked awe
of powers steel persuasion

Pointed blades and bloody stakes
do rack and leave their mark
Dry this thirst and hissing slake
whilst quaking in the dark

Bended backs of broken men
with eyes forced onto the skies
Whisper prayers without amens
while mouths form soundless cries

Roost they do with choices made and evils they have joined
And harken to the afterlife, their souls' purity purloined

Reviews

[therisa]

A moment ago
I was free
And innocent.

Now
I stand before you.

As the noose
Is placed
Around my neck.

Guilty
Of a crime.

Because
I have a different
Skin colour
Than you.

For this sin
I will die
With a clear conscious
And peace of mind.

Regardless
What your God says
Or does to me.

[BlueDreams]

Its profoundly dark writing and meaningful one.. :)

[s y e]

Wow, Blue, this is outstanding. It's so emotional and it flows excellently. It's a dark write, it's deep and really powerful. It speaks volumes and your title is amazing, it pulled me in.

~ Noodle.

[icelandicblue]

Yes, it is dark and I am happy that you found yourself pulled in. You are so kind.

[s y e]

My pleasure. ~ Always.

[Kristin Lee]

I really like this one. The cadence and the message suck you in. They are almost hypnotic. Awesome job.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you for reading and commenting.

[Stefon Napier]

The rhythm of this poem was outstanding. I really enjoyed it.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you again for reading my work.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Wonderful piece... "Roost they do with choices made and evils they have joined" fantastic line!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much. I am pleased you like that line.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

It was a powerful line... it hit a personal note.

[Rita L. Sev]

"Whisper prayers without amens..."

Not shouted, no word of affirmation - as if they really do not believe in what they are doing, or saying...but they keep saying it anyway... Great analogy here.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much for your comments Rita.

[David Scott]

You bring my thoughts to the fall each man will have to face in his life if he is honest. We kid ourselves that we are only bent, but we do break. We do look up to the all to empty skies and "pray".
Yet hope is eternal. Even for the broken, lightning can flash.
A thought provoking write.

[icelandicblue]

Thank David, I think we all have to stand at the gates of hell one time or another.

[Baby Ricochet]

Brings to mind working on a construction crew or forced prison labor. Good rhymes and meter. Great work

[icelandicblue]

Thanks BR I appreciate the comment.