What If

What If

A Poem by Devesh

What if I should wake
before I fall asleep?
Would I see the light?
Or fall a little too deep?

Fade into the sky?
Or swim across the sea?
Just let everything go?
To be, just be.

I see your star shine
amidst all the screams
your light lights my sky,
a blanket of dreams.

Makes me think and wonder
Am I mine to keep?
Why is it that I
am afraid to fall asleep?

© 2014 Devesh


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I like the thoughts and questions in the poem. Sometime sleep lead us to the dark or the light. I did like the closing lines. To fear sleep and dreams would be a bad place to be. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

10 Years Ago

Thank you for reading :))



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I like the thoughts and questions in the poem. Sometime sleep lead us to the dark or the light. I did like the closing lines. To fear sleep and dreams would be a bad place to be. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

10 Years Ago

Thank you for reading :))
Nice poem...simple words but deep thought.... nice work...All the best.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Devesh

10 Years Ago

Thank you for stopping by :))
The poem of an insomniac, very well written.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

10 Years Ago

Thank you for reading :)
New Theory

10 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
Another wonderful work ! Super poetry

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

10 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for stopping by :)
Muchypuu

10 Years Ago

You're welcome
"Makes me think and wonder
Am I mine to keep?
Why is it that I
am afraid to fall asleep?"

You're getting more philosophical, Devesh. I need your poetry to wise me up. ;) But seriously, I adore this poem. Simply, unpretentiously, and brilliantly worded. I missed reading you. Sorry, I had a time off.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

10 Years Ago

Hehe :P No worries, Arzel, I understand, I've been taking time off myself, so haven't read much as w.. read more
Blue

10 Years Ago

Ahh, stun me with Chinese, French, Dutch, and Spanish in the future, okay? :)

You are w.. read more
Devesh

10 Years Ago

I will, as soon as I get around to learning them. :)
Wow I really enjoyed it. I liked the way it flowed. I was a little confused on the meaning but I think I got the gist of it :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

10 Years Ago

Glad you enjoyed it! :)
A write that made me think for sure... Good one Devesh!

~Stefanie

Posted 10 Years Ago


Makes me think and wonder
Am I mine to keep?

A very thought provoking poem. The questions span far further than the actual questions you ask. Great write :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

10 Years Ago

Thank you for reading, Shaquana :)
Love it. A thought-provoking and intriguing write.
Well done :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Devesh

10 Years Ago

Thank you :)
annabellee

10 Years Ago

you're most welcome :)
I love the questions you pose and how it made me think. Awesome job :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

10 Years Ago

Thank you for reading, Lauren :)

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Added on February 27, 2014
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Tags: Life, sleep, dreams and dreaming, fear

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Devesh
Devesh

Hannover, Germany



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