Part 1

Just something I put together one night while thinking about things.

The sweetest guy, was my label from the beginning
We were tripped up but not ready to fall fast
Everything that happened I never thought it could end

I stared into her eyes, I could see her past
So much pain to cover up, then she looked away with pride
If only I could have made that moment last

I told her "let me take some of the pain you don't have to hide"
I can carry on some of those heavy burdens
I'll even take all the blame for our very own demise

It could have been easy, it's not unheard of
She left scars when she dug deep and made my back bleed
But now I am the guilt beneath her shame

Having me plead out for her came as a great surprise
She thought we only had our past left to claim
I hated to hear her say those words: "It didn't feel right..."

Who would have known it would reach my heart
I felt it come hard over me when her nails broke my tough skin
Maybe, it wasn't damned from the start

Now I am here hoping those wounds aren't my last memory
She is lost and but I will take time to look for her
It can't be done there's something missing, this is only part 1

Author's Note

It's not perfect. I'm currently trying to conquering form. I hope everyone enjoys it anyway.

Reviews

["writing by" KS]

I really enjoyed this piece.. thank you can't wait for part 2..

[intuitivesoul]

I'll request you when its finished

["writing by" KS]

Oh yes please.. and thank you

[Tate Morgan]

I would suggest never play the nice guy who takes anothers pain as their own Be the rock all others break upon

[intuitivesoul]

You know that's the best ideas I've heard in a long time! Thank you

[Tate Morgan]

Bearing for her lifes burdens
he sooths the children of their tears
is the rock all others break upon
leaves fond memory of his years

[intuitivesoul]

What writing was that from? I like it!

[Tate Morgan]

A man
A sad tale and a true one
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/aristate/939805/

[Carolann Dowsett]

I thoroughly enjoyed this, not an easy thing to love someone who is full of pain, so easy for them to run away rather than try to see it through. Nicely written.

[intuitivesoul]

Well thank you :) yes those tend to be the ones who are scared of being hurt theirself. I'm glad you were able to enjoy!

[KAOlmsted]

Nice :-D A couple of typos but nothing major. I like what you've done with it. Good job ;-)

[intuitivesoul]

Crap I see them now. Oh the joys of trying to do things from a phone!

[intuitivesoul]

Also, thank you I'm glad you like what I've done with it :)

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure ;-)