Melancholic Sunshine

Morning faded in,

I saw it through the window,

I think that Sun has grown

into morning sin.

Right up there, you see?

Shining light of brilliance

sifting through our lenses

making us to feel..

miserable and in need of

some foreign and new perception,

some new drug with new sensation..

But

you know that Now is only

state of time for us to be

and the time is nothing but the

reflection of you and me.

Reviews

[Kleio13]

Lovely and quite sunny. Nice write hun :)

[isus]

thanx on reading :) i don't find it very sunny though

[Kleio13]

That`s the ironic part haha

[isus]

it really is haha

[Bowers]

very creative, very beautiful.... a unique and captivating piece!

[isus]

thanx for your kind words Bowers :)

[Bowers]

you are very welcome!

[HeazerH]

" I think the sun has grown into morning sin" beautiful.

[isus]

danke deutchland :D

[Rita L. Sev]

I love the title of this piece, Isus. An uplifting piece, I particularly like the last stanza's "you know that Now is only state of time for us to be..." - Amen to that!

[isus]

thanx on reading Rita :)

[Savanna]

I really like this nice job

[isus]

glad you like it

[@zeewhykay]

I loved this piece ! I'm always astonished that people write so incredibly well with english as their second and sometimes 3rd language. I don't know if this is your case but just seeing as you are from croatia I guessed that !

''making us to feel..''

Such an important and thoughtful line here. making us TO feel. I would change a couple veryyy minor things to polish this, but other than that, I can only say great and inspiring work. Well done my new friend.

[isus]

yup, it's my 'second' langauge, but i mostly listen music on english and watch movies on english so i learn it fast. they are teaching it in schools but that's just s**t.

[Frontier]

the poetic voice knows no limits in language

[Mercury Rising]

Time is illusion and is also irrelevant when looking at things from the eternal prospective. A reflection is only an image that is representative of an actual person, without substance. When you see yourself in a mirror, that doesn't mean there are two of you, does it? In the same way, time is illusion.

[isus]

yup, you're very right :)

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

This definitely casts a new and more cynical outlook upon the sunrise.

[isus]

i can agree.

[Jess]

I really like the first couple of lines there great.

[isus]

thanx Jess

[Rachelle]

How we perceive ourselves and the world is rooted in our state of mind. Dreams and wishes drive us to pursue them and when we fall on the wayside, then a sense of misery sets in. Take it as an opportunity to strengthen character, though, instead of drowning in defeat. The next morning is there for us to discover and grow.

[isus]

nicely said :)

[Rachelle]

Thank you! :)